Members Modal Auxiliary Posted November 10, 2003 Members Share Posted November 10, 2003 I've decided to write some lyrics to appeal to the MTV demographic. Tell me what you think: "My angst for you burns like flaming angst,It's hard to think of a word that rhymes with angst.My inability to rhyme just fuels my rage,Despite my rage, I'm a rat in a cage. My frozen desolate soul longs for soulless desolation,Desolation, desolation, angst, desolation.My heart is stone cold and looking for trouble,I played a 40 stringed guitar tuned to 'Q flat' with a shovel." Chorus:"Angst! Grrrrrrrrrrrrr! My angst burns like a urinary tract infection!Angst! Graaaaaaaah! I long for your shadowy embrace!I'm overflowing with angst like a pond used for retention!Hoogajoobagoo angst in your face!" Guitar solo (only four notes, only one string, possibly some octaves) Turntable solo "If only I were handsome like Chester Bennington,But alas, he is angsty despite his dapper appearance.My only way out is to take my own life.Stereotypical blah blah knife. If angst were a ladder I'd be like, at the top rung,My ceiling fan of angst and rage rotates ever faster,Cooling the air with a pleasant breeze of angtsy, rage-like deathWait a minute, that last line was too non-angsty: grrrrrrraaaaah!" Chorus Turntable solo Crying solo Chorus So... What does everyone think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Palmy Posted November 10, 2003 Members Share Posted November 10, 2003 Incredible. All of you can learn a lot from this one. The underlying socio-political message of the lyrics amazes oneself and forces one to think about the economic situation of Czechoslovakia. I'm absolutely in love with the third verse. The rhyming of "Chester Bennington" with "appearance" creates tension for the reader. The tension is finally released when "life" is rhymed with "knife," while keeping the same mood and tone displayed throughout the entirety of the song. The ceiling fan metaphor within the final verse simply blows me away. The rotation of the fan blades obviously represents the confusion experienced by the general teen populace and their ignorance towards the path in life they are to take. You've done it, Modal Auxiliary. I'll be damned, but you've made a fan out of me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Raptor5618 Posted November 10, 2003 Members Share Posted November 10, 2003 Palmy I was thinking just about the same thing but also was considering if this was an allegorical comment on the intricacies of growing up in a stereotypical acrogenous situation. I think perhaps his resolution is the antithesis of this feeling. I also was thinking that they synergistic melding of his words to subtly elucidate on the true meaning of the word angst not just from the concrete repletion in almost a mantra chanting mode but from a metaphysical plane of reference that is truly astounding in both its simplicity and it truly intricate complexity of both textures and tone that as you said is truly an astounding modality in and of itself. In short I think this is really the work of someone with a very interesting mind and I think that if this was written in a truly satirical way then I have to say it is fantastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members red_riviera Posted November 10, 2003 Members Share Posted November 10, 2003 Bizarrely coincidental locations in the first two posts. Could they be the same person? Anyone who has on-line conversations with themselves needs our sympathy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mcflytrap Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 Not bad. I'd turn down the angst a bit. Almost overkill. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Palmy Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 Originally posted by red_riviera Bizarrely coincidental locations in the first two posts. Could they be the same person? Anyone who has on-line conversations with themselves needs our sympathy. Yes, we're the same person. Moron. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members storm_in_heaven Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 If this is a genuine song that you are actually writing... don't bother. The MTV Generation is too stupid to even give a {censored}. If this is a piss-take... its not funny. Noone cares about the MTV Generation. Sorry dude, just my "2 cents" SiH Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Palmy Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 Originally posted by storm_in_heaven If this is a genuine song that you are actually writing... don't bother. The MTV Generation is too stupid to even give a {censored}.If this is a piss-take... its not funny. Noone cares about the MTV Generation.Sorry dude, just my "2 cents"SiH Haha. Hahaahaa. Aha. Go play in traffic, dude. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members storm_in_heaven Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 Originally posted by Palmy Haha. Hahaahaa. Aha. Go play in traffic, dude. Haha. Hahaahaa. Aha. hmmm... nah. SiH Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhythmsavant Posted November 11, 2003 Members Share Posted November 11, 2003 heh heh heeeh... "crying solo" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members confuseitall Posted November 13, 2003 Members Share Posted November 13, 2003 DOOD! U didnt haf enuf 'table solo's in there mang! Plus I could rap on it cause I am waaaay socio-politico and {censored}. Otherwise this cizut ROX!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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