Political Punk Song

There are 50 stars upon the flag

50 bullets in my head

50 nukes pointed at you

50 landmines around you

50 senators go to lunch

50 senators are corrupt

Only half well that ain't so bad

But the others all want our 18 year olds dead

(There are 50 stars upon the flag)

(50 bombs and your all dead)

50 letters in the mail

Containing anthrax, they won

I think there is a unique idea behind this song. Although I wouldn't agree it's an entirely accurate interpretation of today's government , I'd have to say it could (with some tweeking) be a powerful statement against corruption and effective expression of another point of view.

However, and don't take this the wrong way but, Only 50 dead?

For a more dramatic effect I suggest you raise the body count, like this:

There are 50 stars upon the flag

50 bullets in my head

50 nukes pointed at you

50 grenades lying next to you

And...50,000 body bags

50,000 body bags

50 senators go to lunch

50 senators are corrupt

Only half that

Rage Against the Machine is very amusing to listen to. This however, was cheezy, very cheezy. Just keep writing about how your girlfriend dumped your ass and it was all George W. Bush the 2nds fault. At least it would be meant to be funny that way.

Do you have music for this yet?

I do have music for it. My band has it completely arranged. I thought about raising the body count as well. I just couldn't make a better number fit. I haven't tinkered with it that much though.

The second guy can piss off. {censored} face. This is true punk rock. Not that emo crying bull{censored}.

Im just joking man, chill out, go give money the poor or something, it'll make you happy. That way you can acually fight for the opressed instead of further smother him in greed by dishing out dough the "the man".

Would love to hear the finished version when it happens.

Well we are probably going in to record in the next three months. So I can probably get it to you then!

I used to be the primary lyricisit for the punk band I was in about 2 years ago now so I have a bit of experience in writing punk lyrics. While the statement has some real grit and edge to it, the lyrics themselves are weak. They strike me as repetitive and combative just for the sake of being combative. If you have something to say, take a few cues from Jello, Dez, and Buchan and say it. Forget about trying to write a SONG and write what you truly feel.

I don't think the constant reference to the number 50 is needed. Go with what societytease says...just say it.