Please check this out

I posted these lyrics a little while back

Have you ever felt like

you threw your love away?

Put her on a boat and

watched her sail away

to float on the ocean

and dance with the waves

and all you can do is

pray you'll see her someday.

Have you felt like

you gave your love away?

You carried her bags for her

and then put her on a train

and as you tap on the window

and you ask her to stay

she looks at you and smiles

as the train pulls away

but on the horizon

where the tracks meet the sun

it twinkles like diamonds

so you just start to run

but you just want to hold her

and never let go

there is no need to tell her

think she already knows

but you tell her you love her

and that you messed up

when you look in the mirror

its as though its fogged up

your visions so blurry

without her as your eyes

"i know it's alot to ask,

could we try one more time?"

well, we know have a semi completed demo of it (without bass, drums, or slide guitar)

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=515586

tell me what you think (lyrically/melody/etc)

bumpage

I listened to all 3 songs on your site. I am not an expert, so I can only spek from a listeners stand point. I liked the songs, but there is some timing issues, as well as the vocals being a little out of control in a few parts (the loud parts).

You have a very good voice, but it seems to go a little out of control when you sing the loud parts, and once you develop that more you will be an awesome vocalist.

Nice work so far...