Jazz Rock song inside...hehe

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=606357

Well I gave it a jazzy verse and a sort of rock chorus.

Stick with the high FI stream

Enjoy!

This is a great song!

That's all I can say.

Nice work!

Sounds good! There's kind of a male Sade feel to the verse vocal. I really like the lyrical meaning, but not the words so much, particularly the chorus. I like what you're saying, but not how you say it, you know? The lyrics seem a little ham-fisted. "I don't really care" seems like a throwaway line, and the rhymes seem forced. Either find a rhyme worth your time, or do it without the rhymes. The rest of it I really like.

Great singing, great voicings in the clean guitar...I have a couple of comments, though. First, the acoustic guitar in the break really stood out to me - like it didn't really belong there. That's just a matter of personal taste, I guess. Also, if the distorted guitar isn't going to line up with the band hits in the 2nd and 3rd choruses (with the distorted gtr playing on each eighth note), it should be a little more forward in the mix; I think it would sound tighter. I like the syncopation that's happening, but that dirty guitar sounds a little mushy in comparision with the rest of the band.

Good solid tune...thanks for sharing!

Outstanding!!

I really dig your voice. Nice harmony.

I wonder if you don't overuse syncopation a little bit--It's nice just gets a little repetitive. That's not much of a criticism.

I really like the bridge. The acoustic guitar does kind of come from left field, but I really really like it. It adds a new dimension to the song at precisely the right time. The part is really cool too.

The only part I really don't care for is the very end. The harmonized line "I hope it's raining over there" maybe should be left off. It seems a little cheesy to me.

An idea that I had was to add a second guitar part on the second and third choruses. The part that you have now plays accents on the down and upbeat of one, and I think that you have delay on it so it sounds like it's playing on the down and upbeat of two as well--That or you're actually playing on the down and upbeat of two--Really cool by the way. What if instead you had a second distorted guitar part (with different distortion, different amp) play the down and upbeat of two? At the chorus pan the guitar on one a bit right and the guitar on two a bit left. Well.... It's just an idea. Something I have used and never get tired of.

Good luck

Nice!

I really like this one. although I can hear the jazz influences at the begining of this song it really has more of a pop-rock feel that is very consistant with many bands on the pop radio station. Like Maroon 5 and such...but with a touch more rock.

I really have nothing negative to say. As far as the lyric go I can't really tell what is being said since I can't crank the music at work. Well performed and awesome vocals. keep posting.

i totally dig the tune, man. "i hope it's raining . . . ; i know you hate the rain". very cool.

this is a totally good tune, from where i'm sitting. very tight and i'm really digging on that bassline/with the octaves in the guitar.

also, nice hits in the chorus.

the only thing i didn't really like; two things really. was how it ended with the hookline a capella. i guess that's just a taste thing. and also, the hookline going out of the chorus - again, taste, but i think it weakened it a bit.

this tune for me, though, is tight as hell. i really dig it. there was a - dare I be the one to say it? - JOHN MAYER vibe to the vox in the verse that i really liked. it was very cool. nice prod, too. did you track everything or did you use a seqence?

Amazing vocals. I agree with rcb about the distorted sounds placement in the mix. It kinda sounds like he's playing a different song, though thats obviously not the case.

? liked the song,the vocals,the progression...

an additional guitar begining from the second part,occassionally following vocals and playing some tiny solo around the end of the second part is the only thing that comes to my mind.that will make it less repetitious without effecting original texture.

? especially liked the vocals.it has a jamaican feel to it ? dont know why.

Thanks for all the kind words and suggestions guys!

And as for the John Mayer remark, I take that as a big compliment because he sold a lot of records

But your definately right, it does have that feel.

Everything was tracked, no seqencing

Originally posted by Comic_God Everything was tracked, no seqencing

atta boy!

Very nice tune! Hooky and tight. The arrangement seems perfect to my ear. Vocals are excellent! To borrow a quote from bluesway concerning the lyrics of a pop song of his : "Leonard Cohen it ain't" but I think your lyric works well for the intended genre.

Basically agree with everyone else. Solid groove, good vocals, nice song - very bluesway in some ways. I disagree with the John Mayer comparison - I'm not a huge fan, but as far as I can tell he plays exclusively clean sounds on the electric, which brings me to ...

I thought that both the dirty electric and the acoustic kind of detracted from the feel of the song as a whole. I like both of these parts by themselves, but they both seem at odds with the pop-funk groove, which I thought was the key to the song.