Tunes for your commnts

I have uploaded tunes that our band is working on currently.

The tunes were all recorded at our rehearsal so production is not that great.

Please comment on anything you wish but song composition opinions are what I am looking for.

Hope you like them.

Click the music link

Thanks

Toasted Head

hi

I dont have much time now but I am listening to the first song and there is some sinister problem with the vocal and the vocal melody especially in the first verse.

the song did not present anything special to me but not bad either.

well definitely some change in the vocal style and the vocal melody is needed.

Thats all for now.Others will perhaps wellcome the newby.

I started with "Never Enough". Each of the instrumental parts is ok, but there is something rhythmically wrong with this song. I can't point a finger at a specific player or section, but the drums/bass/guitar never seem to accent the same beat at the same time.

I don't know if my funky bone is still out of whack, but I didn't get into "Blame" either. It is the kind of alt rock/Toad the Wet Sprocket song I usually enjoy, and again, each of the parts seems like it should work, but taken together this song is just making my shoulders tense up.

Sorry that I can't come up with anything more constructive.

Thanks for all your comments,

rsadasiv, your comments are constructive to me. I too somehow feel that the songs are rhythmically out of sync or pushed.

Our song writer has a tendency to try to hard to create a rhythem that is new or fresh or different. Which isn't a bad thing but maybe getting back to the basics would help define the band from a production stand point.

With that said, I wonder if the lousy production is cluttering up the tune? All these tracks were reference tracks and not a final arrangement/mix per se. Mic bleed over was abundant and track separation was difficult. We will keep working on and present them for review again.

Thank you for your time

I really like your music.... I can't hear the same rhythmic issues that rsadasiv can.

I started with the same tune that he did, and I liked the feel...

It isn't locked in traditionally like you might hear a rock rhythm section maybe, but It was quirky in a good way.

Nice tunes! Can't wait to hear the finished production!

One of Us - nice swing to the rock rhythm, very catchy and groovin. Instuments are well balanced with the vocals easy to hear and up front (my preference). Nice drums and bass.

I also liked how the lead poked out with a cool riff during the verses...Mix in general was very good.....One small thing - the pre-chorus was a bit repetitive lyric wise.....Sweet leads on the guitar......good ending.

I'm listening to Blame right now. It seems to be a well written song. I say "seems to be" because I have no idea what your singing about. The vocals are way too low in the mix-and possibly too much reverb? I don't know. the melody on the vocals seems to work so I'll give you the benifit of the doubt.

I like some of the changes and accents that the drummer is adding.

Overall this seems to be a catchy tune, just needs to be mixed better.

keep posting and be sure to check out other people's music on here. You will get more reviews when/if you review other's songs as well.

Thank you all for taking the time not only to listen but to post a comment. I am greatful for all critques both in favor or critical of the music. At my age it doesn't make sense to get worked up over a negative comment.

I will bring all these suggestions back to the group fpr discussion and try to incorporate them into the mix.

Geno_xl I listened to your tunes and love the guitar tones. Your voice has a very nice tone to it as well. My teenage boys were digging the songs as well. I will try to review other music posted here and contribute an unbiased opinion.

Thanks you again from the noob

i'm checking out "over-flown". (Pearl Jam 'even flow' rhythm - niceness)

right off the bat, i'm not crazy about the vocal inflections he's using - a little overdone for me. it's putting on a false voice a bit too constantly. (i think i'd like it more in between more candid singing)

the tune got a bit repetitive for me - there was no growth or development throughout - even at the odd-meter point. by the third minute, i felt ready for the end of the song, but there was still a lot left. i didn't feel a bridge or any moment of retreat from what i thought was really just the same thing as the first ten seconds. so, in other words, i didn't feel like this song went anywhere for me. in my tunes, i do this alot, too. i stay too static sometimes whereas, good music for me has a sense of development.

from a playing perspective, i felt it was tight and even though the guitar player is a bit too riffy for MY personal taste, i really think he knows his place and does a good job of not stepping on the vocal melody. . . . which brings me to the vocal melody:

there was no melodic hook in this song for me. i understand that the vocals already didn't appeal to my ear in their timbre and that could skew a listener, so i'm trying to judge the melody objectively with that in mind. i don't think the singer took me anywhere too special with this one. the melody was just a bit uninteresting for me.

i hope you get this is just MY opinion and i think you could do better. and YES, i only checked this song for now. i'll listen to another if you post for one specifically that you want heard. key: just comment on others' music, and we'll gladly be part of your critique club!

ps - welcome to HC. it's a helpful place

I listened to over-flown. The vocals need to come up--I like the sound of the voice, but it really fades into the wallpaper at several points.

From what I can make out of the lyrics and the melody, I could really like this song, but it gets really draggy. For a song of this length, I really need some vocal harmonies, riff changes, tone changes, counterpoint, anything to keep the interest up. I didn't make it through the whole thing.

Bluesway & Chicken,

You both make very valid arguments.

It's refreshing to have 2 good reviews with varying opinions about the content of the same song.

All the songs posted are in fact rehearsal recording for reference of all the band members to analyze and bring production suggestion back to the booth. Vocal harmories are being planned for all the songs.

Our singer/songwriter has often told me not to post these cuts before final mixes are complete but I disagree with him.

The masters we have done on these songs still IMO don't sound as good as the songs posted on SC.

The observations and reviews here and at other forums give much food for thought as we go back and record them again.

I take all the criticism here as advice to hopefully make a better song in the end.

Again I thank you for your valuable time.

The geezer