Members ido1957 Posted June 3, 2008 Members Share Posted June 3, 2008 I submitted the first rough version of this for the April Challenge...I now have what I consider a completed mix.... I'd appreciate your feedback on this one. The lyrics are available on the song page... The link to the song:http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=5784651&q=hi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stratmonkee Posted June 3, 2008 Members Share Posted June 3, 2008 Nice song, I wish I could write "real" heartfelt lyrics like this...evreytime I do, I don't have the confidence, and end up trashing them. Music fits the song well, thinking maybe some kind of instrumental, guitar solo may add a little spice to song...it seems to stay in one gear all the way thru both musically and emotionally.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tspit74 Posted June 3, 2008 Members Share Posted June 3, 2008 I loved that song in April and still love it now. Being the self-indulgent, over the top 70's pop fan that I am, I'd probably over do it and add lots of Wings-style harmonies and some synth and string flourishes and make it sound like the bastard child of "Time Passages" or "Baby Come Back." But the way you've got it, the songs shines thru. Great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 4, 2008 Members Share Posted June 4, 2008 ido1957 - You personify the "give to get" ethos that this forum is built on. I salute you - your karma is impeccable. I've commented on this one before, but I suspect that I am bringing my own concerns/hangups/issues to your songs, instead of accepting your songs on their own terms. So if you post here or pm me the issues YOU are concerned about, I will do my best to keep my own personal baggage out of the equation and lend a sympathetic ear to help you as best I can. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members 3rd_harmonic Posted June 4, 2008 Members Share Posted June 4, 2008 next time I'm writing about how good love is when it's working, I hope I can capture the same feeling that you have here. here's to that time coming sooner rather than later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted June 5, 2008 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2008 Thanks stratmonkee, tspit74, rsadasiv, 3rd_harmonic.... I appreciate your kind words and all the comments you take the time to write. The great suggestions I receive from this forum have really helped me with my writing skills over the past and surely into the future.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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