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My Third Song--Critiques Welcome


Songwriter81

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This is catchy as heck. I can see why Nick belabored the obvious -- it's really crying out for bass and drums -- but you can sweat that later.

 

My only real problem here is the quote from the preacher... quote or not, it's awkward enough to almost stop the song in its tracks. I'd stick with the type of rhymes you have most of the way through there, even if you have to paraphrase. ;)

 

A fun little song!

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