An Apology Song

So I messed things up with this girl and wrote a song about it. It only took about an hour, which is far faster than usual for me. That's likely because the lyrics were more personal, sincere, and thus easier to write.

The chord progressions are all pretty standard. G C D G C C/B Am D G in the verses, G Em C D in the chorus and G B C G Am C G C G in the bridge.

"Start Again"

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Lyrics:

Well fifty four messages and a letter I half wrote

A quiver stuck inside my throat

A permanent reminder of mistakes that I have made

Hoping I can see you before the good memories fade

Feel alone in a crowded room just waiting for your call

Hope I can still here anything at all

Cause my ears are ringing hard and loud from a conscience shouting out

So if you're wondering if I'm sorry then there really is no doubt

And if could only start again

Have a second chance at a lost romance

Well I know that I could show you then

But now the choice is up to you. So whatcha gonna do?

Well in 1992 I was born without a care

Now I'm trapped in frozen air

Cause without you here to warm me I can't seem to make it through

No without you here beside me I just can't seem to move

And if could only start again

Have a second chance at a lost romance

Well I know that I could show you then

But now the choice is up to you. So whatcha gonna do?

So if you hate me more than I hate myself that I understand all to well

And though I'm praying that you'll take me back I guess only time will tell

I guess only you can tell

And I never did believe you when you said you were done with love

I'll prove you haven't had enough

Though I know a million promises mean nothing without trust

Well honey please believe me. You won't have to leave it to luck

And if we could only start again

Well I know we'd last, know our time hasn't passed

This shouldn't have to be the end

I'll show you what I can be. Just stick around and see.

A lefty? That's unusual, don't see too many lefty guitar players. I say forget about trying to patch it up. Just use the experience to write more songs. Or you could get back to gether to have her walk out again, and that could inspire some more good tunes? But that pooch has already been enjoyed :-( time to move on... I like the song, but it seemed like in places the words didn't really flow, and in others they did. I would say it's a good start.

Actually I'm right handed, the Mac webcams just flip everything for whatever reason. Thanks for the comment, but could you be more specific with where the words flow and don't?

i think its a matter of phrasing,, sometimes you have to play a song a bunch of times and figure out where you are trying to cram too many words into a given space.. Change the words or delivery to accomadate.. i find it helps to write songs with the beat of the song in mind.. I fit words and syllables into what works with the song and is suggested by the rhythym or whatever.. It makes it much easier to deliver.

The sentiments and ideas are really good .. If you really want her back this might work

I do feel like you use a lot of words in many of your songs. But nevertheless, the melody and rhythm accompany them very well. I think a good challenge would be to write a song using very few words. Sometimes when the lyrics are short, they may not seem so amazing, but it can make the words that much more special. But I do like this song. It's a nice catchy folk tune. Good job.

I think you and Nirvana728 would make an interesting collaboration.

I think you should slow it down. I can hear the pain and frusteration in your voice.....but the guitar is up tempo and cheerful.

I like it. I think there are some slight problems with the transitions into the chorus, and some of the rhymes seem a little forced to accompany the words. But, those are pretty minor things, the song itself is great.

I was kind of thinking this too, but I think if he slowed it down to much, it may feel like the song would be dragging a lot, the upbeat guitar and the frustrated lyrics clash pretty nicely I think.

I like the contradiction between the upbeat guitar and the more anguished message of the lyric. Yes, it might be a little wordy in parts, but overall it works. For some reason I'm reminded of Ever Fallen In Love With Someone You Shouldn't Have Fallen In Love With by The Buzzcocks.

It kind of reminds me of something The Old 97's would write. I like it.