My latest song called "Fever". Quite a departure from my older tunes

The joints in my fingers are still hurting after a month so I decided to use my synthsizer in Protools and create a song using it. After I was done I couldn't help but adding some simple distorted chord progression in the mix. I actually really like this song even though it's not my typical style of music. I hope you like it as well.

Cheers,

Deric

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FEVER

I kind of like it

I kind of don't

I kind of like it ...

when you leave me alone

You kind of need me

You kind of don't

You only want me

When I leave you alone

That's why...

I'm in a hurry

So take it slow

I'm in a hurry woman

Don't you know

I want your body

I want your soul

I want you honey

won't you coat my throat with love...with love

I got a fever

It's in my bones

I got a fever girl

and your my cold

I need no doctor

Don't need no nurse

You're my prescription

so I feel no hurt

I really like the vibe - kind of tribal and gets to your core. It builds slowly to 2:00 then explodes exactly like it should. You have a great voice too, low range, tenor and whisper. I was also intrigued for the full duration and this was a longish tune.

:thu:

I really like the vibe - kind of tribal and gets to your core. It builds slowly to 2:00 then explodes exactly like it should. You have a great voice too, low range, tenor and whisper. I was also intrigued for the full duration and this was a longish tune. :thu:

Yeah it is long. 5:25 to be exact. I'm always leery of writing such long songs because you wonder if you can keep the audience engaged or not. I'm glad it worked in your case. Thanks for the compliments is there anything you would add though?

Cheers,

Deric

Very cool. I haven't been really into the other stuff you've posted--strictly a matter of personal taste, I can see the talent there pretty thick--but this one is up my alley. Kind of NIN/INXS thing going. If it was on the radio, I'd like to have it shorter. At this length, it would be awesome as movie music during a descent-into-the-underworld (figuratively or literally) montage. In that case, I'd like a bit more interest added throughout the second half. We're not getting any new information lyrically, the music is just a bit louder, but not different. Maybe an additional texture in there or something?

I know what you mean about adding an extra layer on the back nine. I think I'll try to do some lead stuff over the top. I got a friend whose a good guitarist and he might want to help me out.

Great lyrics.

I especially liked:

You kind of need me

You kind of don't

You only want me

When I leave you alone

Very neat follow up to the pattern of words and thoughts that you set up in the first verse

+1 to Chicken Monkey's comment that some extra interest, either lyrically or musically, wouldn't hurt in the second half.

I like the INXS vibe and the Tusk kind of beat. Good flavor overall. Good expressive voice.

Seems like the 1st half of the 4th bar of the verses needs to drop, musically, a little to keep it interesting. The music that is, not the vocal.

Definitely could use some musical variation. The lesson for this piece is that the mind of a listener "tires" of a sound after a bit and you should refresh the listener with variations to your main theme.

I like it, overall.

excellent tune man.. the verb is killing me on the vox tho.. I guess its the effect you where going for but for me I'd much rather the up close and personel on something like this.

I like the lyrics, and I like vibe. Nice work

When you say "drop" what do you mean? Just lower the volume or simply stop the music all together?

Like all songwriters we listen to our songs over and over critiquing them along the way and I agree I need to come up with something lyrically and musically to take it to another place if you will. Texture it up a bit. I've got some ideas I'll try to add them soon. Thx for the critique.

Cheers,

Deric

Hey SB,

I'm glad you mentioned the reverb on the vox. I took it down by 20% and I think they pop out much better so thx for the sharing your irritations.

Cheers,

Deric

yeah man, this is good stuff ... exists on its own ... it's a song, and it works

very well done

Listened to it this morning, I was trying to figure out what this reminded me of (in a good way) --- and I just thought of it -- The Jesus and Mary Chain.

Cool stuff -- though the whooo-whoo around 1:27 then at 4:30 for me didn't quite fit -- it's almost haunting but not quite. It sounds better about the 4:30 than the earlier portion but it was more distracting.

Edited to add: I really really liked it.

Thx, I'll try to rerecord that part

Thx Mr. Funk!

Loving this. Downtempo that builds reaaaaal nice.

By drop I mean a lower note/chord. I can't play it on this computer, but for instance if the song is in say, Em, maybe you do that little part in Am or A or whatever. Not necessarily that much in your song case, but just lower, to keep it fresh coming around at the end each time.

Just a thought.

Nice....Original..good stuff!! Very dark sounding....and picks up nicely midway...

Listened to it twice today again at the office on my headphones and I didn't find it disjoint -- perhaps at first listen I wasn't expecting it.

Perhaps since it reminded me of J&MC (edit: in a very good way) so much, and they have a tendency for melodic "moaning" my expectation for the sonic "nature" differed from what you had done and thus seemed a bit off.

Just added some drums to the mix. They're midi but I think it gives it some nice ummph!