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A Germ of Something (1/15)


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Just The Happy Times

 

When mom was in the nursing home

I stopped by every day at lunch

And after she passed, I kept going

Partially out of habit

And partially for the good karma

But mostly because I'm a social person

And if I don't get out and talk to people

Something is not right in my day.

So there's this one old lady

Not as good as some, but better than most

She's got a VCR and a big stack of tapes in her room.

When I visit I ask the people if they want to watch

A different channel on the tv

The news maybe, or one of the soaps.

But all she ever wants to do is

Play those tapes again and again

"Just the happy times, Bill" she says

"Put in one of the happy times".

And it's the standard sort of home movie stuff

From when her kids were little and she was young.

So I've seen these kids

Opening presents and blowing out candles

Dying Easter eggs and climbing trees

Over the span of several years.

But I realized today

That while I know exactly what they looked like as babies

I have no idea what they look like now.

I try to ask her about it but all she will say is:

"Just the happy times, Bill

"Put in one of the happy times".

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Hey songwriting got moved to the top! Yeah! First I have to say, rsadasiv? You are a handsome man? You have that whole Johnny Depp thing going on? Not that I go that way, but ever since that 1st long night in prison? Well... I'm more open minded?

 

I read through your post? And it's nice, but it doesn't seem/feel like a song (to me) it feels more like a nice story, or an anecdote, is this a song? Or is that what you mean when you say "A germ of something?" Because if it is, I think I know what you mean now.

 

Merry Christmas everyone!! I hope you all had a wonderful holiday season.

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I read through your post? And it's nice, but it doesn't seem/feel like a song (to me) it feels more like a nice story, or an anecdote, is this a song?

 

 

I agree with ^^^, but you always manage to pull these sorts of lyrics off once you set them to music. I'd be really conscious of putting some catchy, recurring stuff in the track, and it could work as a song. I liked the lyrics as a standalone poem.

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Hey songwriting got moved to the top! Yeah! First I have to say, rsadasiv? You are a handsome man? You have that whole Johnny Depp thing going on? Not that I go that way, but ever since that 1st long night in prison? Well... I'm more open minded?

 

Hey Robby - missed you around here - Lenny got so choked up he even wrote a song about you. As far as the avatar, it's "throwback avatar week" in GJ, and when I first joined I was Johnny Depp :eek:.

 

I read through your post? And it's nice, but it doesn't seem/feel like a song (to me) it feels more like a nice story, or an anecdote, is this a song? Or is that what you mean when you say "A germ of something?" Because if it is, I think I know what you mean now.

 

Pretty much. I'm trying to find a new lyrical voice, so I'm just posting stuff as it comes to me without worrying too much about how I am going to make it work as a song. The plan for this year is to go back and edit/actualize the stuff I've posted.

 

Merry Christmas everyone!! I hope you all had a wonderful holiday season.

 

I did, thanks, and happy New Year to you.

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I'd be really conscious of putting some catchy, recurring stuff in the track, and it could work as a song. I liked the lyrics as a standalone poem.

 

 

All of your recent 'Germs' have shared this quality......excellent images that stick. There are lyrics in there, though.......it'll be like mining a rich vein.

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