It's Sunny Here Too

I finally have a new song to share. It

Oh cool, I really like the chords...it reminds me of some sort of folk type song...strange chords...love 'em!

The voice suits it too...

Love the words and sentiment of the song. It's so cool. LOVE THIS!

PS. Like the rhyme of "wanted" and "flaunted", lol

PPS. This reminds me of early Fleet Foxes...not that I've ever heard any of their stuff, but I think it's your vocal quality. Very nice and interesting.

Thanks Grace! I appreciate you listening, and I'm glad you like it. I've never heard of Fleet Foxes, but I'm about to google them.

Thanks for the tip on the Fleet Foxes. I like their music, and I can hear a little resemblance. I always wonder who do I sound like, so it's nice to get some feedback.

Are you committed to the high vocals? It sounds like you are straining to hit quite a few of the notes. Have you considered going down an octave? If that is too low, perhaps capo a few spots higher to bring those lows up into your range.

Edit: Listening to the first few measures of "Didn't We" solidifies my confidence in this idea. You've got some great tone in that lower register.

That small change at the very end is sweet.

And furthermore......

This is a pretty good tune but it could have come across as even better with more careful attention to the singing. Think about your message and your lyrics....practice them so that you can deliver them in a manner that is a bit more effective.

No problem here with the high vox, but work on really knowing how you want to sing it so that you can put everything you have into each passage.

Cool song.

Man, I thought this was a songwriting forum, not a vocalist forum. Thanks for the insults, though.

Well, the vocals are a HUGE part of any song, ya know? Unless it's an instrumental, the voice is the thing that delivers the story and delivers the feeling...but I like your voice. I do see what Lenny means though. Right now I think the vocals are at about 70% and if they went up even to 80-90%, it'd be really really good.

Hmmm.....just tryin' to help. We need to be the best that we can be so our songs can have a chance to be heard.

I've always liked your stuff.

I certainly meant no offense. Unless otherwise specified, I assume songs are meant for the composer to perform and I thought finding a more comfortable range might make it stronger without impacting the song quality.

I really liked the slow, minor rag feel of the verses... the transition into the 'bright' refrains is, of course, more than a bit of a jump, clearly by design. But it's a big jump. Not an unsuccessful one, but a bit jarring, nonetheless. As probably intended. It does inform the lyrical contrasts as I'm sure was your intent.

Those lyrics are often quite clever, with all that implies. Some of the rhymes are a lot of fun.

But I kind of feel like you just didn't have the heart to take this song where it really seemed to want to go, plot-wise: I couldn't help but feel like you needed to give the knife that sharp little twist that would leave the stabee no doubt about what had just happened, even as it avoided the overt -- and without lapsing out of the witty light-hearted tone, of course, which would help us laugh at what seems to be a sang-froid-ish edge.

A nice, slightly nasty charm that might still need a little sharpening...

Eddie, I'm positive these guys didn't mean to be insulting in any way. And I didn't even think twice about their comments until I got to your reaction. (I couldn't help but wonder if maybe you'd meant to add a grin icon.) But it does highlight the reality that we all can have our sensitive areas and moments. So it's good to be reminded that, no matter what we intend in our comments, they may be taken in various ways.

While we try to keep our focus on the songwriting, the other stuff can't help but sneak in. I just got done referring to another songwriter's use of Auto-Tune-as-effect in another thread, and you know me, I'm Mr-keep-the-focus-on-songwriting.

At any rate, I hope you wont' be put off in any way. I know I've always enjoyed your songs and envied your guitar playing. And I rather like your voice. If we all sang like Mario Lanza -- or Lady Gaga -- where would the fun be in that?

this is really... good

Ray Davies and The Kinks. I hear what you're doing. And... a taste of Jonathan Richmond. It's clever, funny, sad, angry, cute. I swear, if you had a Kinks style electric chorus and trash can drums when it goes to the major chorus...

What gets me is you're pulling it off, for the most part, with just the guitar and your voice. Actually, I sort of get your voice and think it's kind of... charming?

It wouldn't hurt to pull the key down to get a feel for your voice with less strain. But hey, it's cool too.

Nice song - clever in places and trying too hard to be clever in others. Overall I like the chords and melody, except the chords around "Well, guess what? It's sunny here, too" which are big and major in a way which doesn't match the rest of the song.

Thanks for the feedback guys. I'll work on the vocals and try and upload a new recording soon. I understand what you mean about the transition from the minor key verses to the major key chorus being abrupt. I'll look into throwing in a couple of transition chords. The abrupt change is effective when played live, though, for getting the crowd's attention.