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tony333

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  1. Thank you for the feedback. But I have to disagree. The extra words throw it off time and out of tempo and in my opinion are unnecessary. And some of them throw the meaning of the line off to the point that it looses its meaning or doesn't make sense. Like how does someone dress up "more" like Sundance. The one place i do agree with is the last line to the second verse, " Doesn't feel like we're essential all the time". it is too short and causes a chord change that is not consistent with the rest of the verses. I have been running that line over and over again in my head. The best I have come up with is , " Sure wish we could feel essential all the time., which i just came up with at work so i have to get home to try and sing and play it . Again thank you. Once I get it recorded "properly" I will repost.
  2. I really like the words to this. I have attached a really rough version. Still working on tempo and keeping the tempo and a couple places of the phrasing. It has also been awhile since I've been able to pick up the guitar, and it shows. Homemade Haircuts VI Rona flew in from out of town, much to no one's surprise The straw man in the castle never opened up his eyes Mother Nature waved her hand, telling all of us good-bye Lady Luck held her breath, trying not to cry Randall bows his head at night to say his evening prayers Robin thinks the time has come to straighten her affairs Monday turns to Sunday in just under a year Saturday says " Come on, I can get us out of here" CHORUS Now it's homemade haircuts and cheap box wine Friday night parties over telephone lines Outsides all are empty cause we're smoking inside All just looking for somewhere new to hide VII Roy's driving big rigs, making runs from state to state I'm just out here working, tempting wisdom's fate Wind still blows and birds still sing like nothings ever changed Meanwhile it's all upside down, stamped and rearranged Lynn dresses like Sundance to go to the grocery store Glenda's lost so much time, doesn't know the days no more Talking heads on TV news have gone and picked up sides Shirts and skins and harlequins should feel essential all the time CHORUS So it's homemade haircuts and cheap box wine Friday night parties over telephone lines Outsides all are empty cause we're smoking inside All just looking for somewhere new to hide VIII The world ended on a Tuesday between Christmas and Spring All the thoughts and prayers couldn't save the lyric king Moon as big as Hercules, his muscles shining through The queen wept at the souvenirs and 23 skidoo CHORUS Now it's homemade haircuts and cheap box wine Friday night parties over telephone lines Outsides all are empty cause we're smoking inside All just looking for somewhere new to hide We' all just looking for somewhere new to hide
  3. So what I was trying to convey was from the perspective of someone who has shown their love and the person still questions that fact. And that if they were able to do these things, would that person then believe that the love was true.
  4. Wrote and roughly recorded this while on vacation. Ever Been VI If I said I love you In a thousand different ways Or lassoed The truth Just for you to give away If I climbed Highest hills And I parted all the seas If I gathered The stars Tell me then would you believe Tell me then Tell me then Would you believe VII If I swayed The moon Into giving tides freewill And suspended All of time Making all the clocks stand still If I talked The sky Into only setting suns Little darling You would know You've ever been the only one Youve ever been You've ever been The only one VIII if I persuaded Gravity Into simply letting go Or whispered To the wind Convincing it to never blow If I talked The sky Into only setting suns Little darlin You would know You've ever been the only one You've ever been You've ever been The only one
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