Members catphish Posted July 24, 2007 Members Share Posted July 24, 2007 so, we're recording the last song on the album this weekend. it's been written for months but I never did words for it. I still have no words for it. I've been working on it for three days straight. We're rehearsing it tomorrow night, and i need words!!!! GAH!!!! inspire me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators ThudMaker Posted July 24, 2007 Moderators Share Posted July 24, 2007 so, we're recording the last song on the album this weekend. it's been written for months but I never did words for it. I still have no words for it. I've been working on it for three days straight. We're rehearsing it tomorrow night, and i need words!!!! GAH!!!!inspire me.SmokinFiddler. Write about it. 'nuff said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 24, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 24, 2007 SmokinFiddler. Write about it. 'nuff said. I {censored} you not...one attempt from last week was about a pawn broker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators ThudMaker Posted July 24, 2007 Moderators Share Posted July 24, 2007 I {censored} you not...one attempt from last week was about a pawn broker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 GAH!!!!! FRAK! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members The Insomniac Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 Frodo lives Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Death Hands Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 If we could have some basis of the track itself... key, tempo stuff, etc... Just for feel purposes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 If we could have some basis of the track itself... key, tempo stuff, etc... Just for feel purposes. one moment please... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Death Hands Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 one moment please... Right on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 keep in mind this is just a recording of the idea....the main melody, and arrangement isn't here at all. Here ya go Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Death Hands Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 keep in mind this is just a recording of the idea....the main melody, and arrangement isn't here at all. Here ya go It's begging for a talking, storyteller, Bob Dylan type of vocal. "Well, I was going down the highway..." that sort of deal. I can see why you'd get stuck. This piece is so open that you could do so many things with it lyrically and vocally that you literally have no more space for options. I, personally, liked it as an instrumental piece. Add a more pronounced lead presence that counters some of the other melodic parts, and you've got a nice instrumental track. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 It's begging for a talking, storyteller, Bob Dylan type of vocal. that was my first attempt. "everyday a test of willjust don't react ignore the facts, and take all your pills" got shot down by the band....they wanted more of a melody. I think I may have a start though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Death Hands Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 that was my first attempt. "everyday a test of will just don't react ignore the facts, and take all your pills" got shot down by the band....they wanted more of a melody. I think I may have a start though. If they have the ability to shoot you down, they can help with some of the lifting, then. It's a starting point, for sure. I wish I could be of more help, but I suck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 If they have the ability to shoot you down, they can help with some of the lifting, then. It's a starting point, for sure. I wish I could be of more help, but I suck. they really don't. I don't like most of my lyrics (including the stuff posted above), but almost all of the stuff they come up with is really bad. All the stuff going on to the album, so far, I'm really happy with, but this one damn song is just not happening for me lyrically. I like the song.....just can't get a trail on any words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tylytle Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 Just mumble some {censored} and let the listeners figure out what they think you're trying to say. Worked for Nervana... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 Just mumble some {censored} and let the listeners figure out what they think you're trying to say. Worked for Nervana... and for Nirvana. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ryry215 Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 If you can give me an idea about what you want the song about I think I can help. I'm a lyrics machine...My band has like 75+ original songs with all but one or two having my lyrics. I like the idea you've got going. Are they against the idea, or the way you said it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tylytle Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 and for Nirvana. HEHE goes to show how much i paid attention to them.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 If you can give me an idea about what you want the song about I think I can help. I'm a lyrics machine...My band has like 75+ original songs with all but one or two having my lyrics. I like the idea you've got going. Are they against the idea, or the way you said it? I ditched the original idea. I normally try to keep my lyrics vague, but this may not be. Here's what I've got so far.... Fear fans the flameburning volume and versethey cleaned the classroom suet fills the airspirals up toan atmospheric vacuum. Sunday school classwouldn't question the course,or sacred sermon. Don't raise your hand.you can't question, inquire,or determine. Everyone under the suncould admit, they don't know. But they would not allow themselvesto be left behind. At present it's too anti religion, and not vague enough for my taste. if you have input or ideas....go for it. Please don't anyone be offended if I scrap these ideas, or yours, and start from scratch. I'm not really happy with anything up to this point. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 ....even reading those now is already making me cringe. Dammit. I'm not Roger Waters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ryry215 Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 I understand the song writing thing. I've tossed thousands upon thousands of lyrics...I'll see what I can come up with. I might just try to re-work some of these to be a little bit less obvious if that's cool. But it reads like an anti-establishment song, so I'll try to keep that idea in mind. I actually like it like it is though... *edit* btw, how far into the song do the lyrics start? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 I understand the song writing thing. I've tossed thousands upon thousands of lyrics...I'll see what I can come up with. I might just try to re-work some of these to be a little bit less obvious if that's cool. But it reads like an anti-establishment song, so I'll try to keep that idea in mind. I actually like it like it is though... I guess it is, as it stands now, anti establishment...maybe too much so. *bangs head into desk* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members catphish Posted July 25, 2007 Author Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 I understand the song writing thing. I've tossed thousands upon thousands of lyrics...I'll see what I can come up with. I might just try to re-work some of these to be a little bit less obvious if that's cool. But it reads like an anti-establishment song, so I'll try to keep that idea in mind. I actually like it like it is though... *edit* btw, how far into the song do the lyrics start? doesn't matter...that's just a recording of the two parts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ryry215 Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 the flame of fear shines brightburning volume and versethe classrooms have been cleaned suet fills the airspiraling up to an atmospheric vacuum. lessons in the classroomdon't question the course,or the sacred words. Don't raise your hand.you can't question, inquire,or determine truth. Everyone under the suncould admit they don't know. But they would not allow themselvesto be left behind. I tried to keep the feeling you had, but make it a little more symbolic and less obviously anti-religious. I really didnt change much. It still has those messages, but you would have to read into the lyrics to get them. IMO, that's what makes good lyrics. Two different people can take something completely different from them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members lowboy Posted July 25, 2007 Members Share Posted July 25, 2007 Suet fills the air? I'm not touching that one... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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