Members tony333 Posted July 9, 2019 Members Share Posted July 9, 2019 Wrote and roughly recorded this while on vacation. Ever Been VI If I saidI love youIn a thousand different ways Or lassoed The truthJust for you to give away If I climbedHighest hillsAnd I parted all the seas If I gatheredThe starsTell me then would you believe Tell me thenTell me thenWould you believe VII If I swayedThe moonInto giving tides freewill And suspended All of timeMaking all the clocks stand still If I talkedThe skyInto only setting suns Little darling You would knowYou've ever been the only one Youve ever beenYou've ever beenThe only one VIII if I persuadedGravityInto simply letting go Or whisperedTo the windConvincing it to never blow If I talkedThe skyInto only setting suns Little darlinYou would knowYou've ever been the only one You've ever beenYou've ever beenThe only one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Idunno Posted August 27, 2019 Members Share Posted August 27, 2019 Actually, I'm not connecting the undoing of natural things with a display or love. I would connect it with an unnatural force messing around with nature but that's where it stops. Now, should you write about undoing all those natural things as deeds to prove love, then it has to be connected in a manner that we understand and not a reach. In Scarborough Fair, the lyrics "Tell her to make me a cambric shirt. Without no seams or needle work. Then she'll be a true love of mine." is similar to your flow of impossible deeds so I'm guessing there's some influence there. But, even that song doesn't jump right out and elicit love. Who needs someone to perform impossible deeds as a show of love? That's counter intuitive. If anything, I see it as a way to ensure that love does not develop. It's like saying I'll love you when monkeys fly out of your butt. Like I said, love needs to be connected to deeds one would associate with enticing it. I do like the minimized lyric style, though, and try to use it when I can. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tony333 Posted August 28, 2019 Author Members Share Posted August 28, 2019 So what I was trying to convey was from the perspective of someone who has shown their love and the person still questions that fact. And that if they were able to do these things, would that person then believe that the love was true. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IronKnee Posted March 31, 2020 Members Share Posted March 31, 2020 Hey there Tony, I really like the line about the moon being persuaded into giving the tides their free will. That's a real good line and, quite possibly, a very unique one, as well. Not so easy to come up with little gems, like that. Anyways, You have some good stuff to work with, and I would say you have a great start! Keep on..... 😎-Tom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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