My next song - If you're lonely

[stickboymusic]

Damn it's quiet round here.

 

So I wrote this song a while back (i think it made it on here) but it was a super slow plodding affair and i canned it.

 

Just had a play through last night in a much more up tempo way

 

Here is just a rough live recording.....do you think the subject is working in this style?

 

 

https://soundcloud.com/stickboy/if-youre-lonely-live-demo

 

Anything jumping out in the lyrics before I start recording properly?

 

If you're lonely then it seems you do not know

I've been hanging round forever

Only to find

I am never in your arms

And never on your mind

 

If you're lonely

Reach out your hand and hold me

For a million days won't matter if you don't see...

That a million dreams will shatter if I leave

 

Love is like a rollercoaster

Passing by at speed

You have to make the ups and downs

Before you can proceed

If you just wanna take this ride alone then let it show

I guess that lonely is the only thing you know

 

Its the only thing you know

As the lonesome rivers flow

And the crying winds they blow

I guess that lonely is the only thing you know

 

Life is like a carousel

Spinning out of time

It's easier to take the lows (I think these two lines may need to tie in more with a carousel?)

Than try and chance the climb

If you just wanna take this ride alone....

Then let me go

I guess that lonely is the only thing you know

 

[LeonardScaper]

It is quiet, isn't it?

 

That's ok.....I'm in a writing frame of mind still. So good to hear you again.....I liked it when you brought your voice down and more intimate at the end of the song.

 

Anyway, since you asked.......I like the rollercoaster lines but the carousel ones caught me up a bit in that the image did not fit for me. To me a carousel is a pretty safe ride with no serious climbs that one must chance.