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[tony333]

This is unfinished for sure. I dont really like the chorus but its what came out. The first verse feels lke a second or third verse. Definitely needs some work and a title.

 

 

V Hitting rock bottom it ain’t so bad

But my feet can’t find the floor

I’d let you into this crazy mess

But my head don’t have no door

 

Feeling lost and broken

These walls are glassy smooth

Better grab ahold of something quick

Cause a fall is my next move

Yeah a fall is my next move

 

 

V Living this lie it’s not so hard

Between the truths and tragedy

Spinning in time going nowhere fast

Im my own worst enemy

My own worst enemy

 

Felling wired and weary

Got to swallow all this fear

Some say it’s better to burn away

But I think I’ll just disappear

I think I’ll just disappear

 

C it’s a crazy kind of living

In these crazy kind of times

But I’ve got crazy figured out

So I guess I’m doing fine

I guess I’m doing fine

[LCK]

You have some nice images. Some of it doesn't make sense to me.

 

Hitting rock bottom it ain’t so bad

But my feet can’t find the floor

 

For instance, this ^ might work better as:

 

Hitting rock bottom wouldn't be so bad

if my feet could find the floor

 

[Delmont]

Glad you used a lot of concrete images. That's one thing people writing about feelings forget to do. You're on to something!

 

Del

http://www.thefullertons.net

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