Members LeonardScaper Posted July 29, 2016 Members Share Posted July 29, 2016 Place your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Stop the hands of time And we'll close the deal ............. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted July 30, 2016 Author Members Share Posted July 30, 2016 Place your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Stop the hands of time And we'll close the deal ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ........... ............. Have you seen a sign That might make a difference Did that single time Really make this real Put your hand in mine And we'll go the distance Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 30, 2016 Members Share Posted July 30, 2016 Good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted July 31, 2016 Author Members Share Posted July 31, 2016 Raw Sketch of a Germ....of an Idea http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13424953&q=hi Intro V1 Place your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Stop the hands of time And we'll close the deal This was so hard to find But still something's missing V2 Have you seen a sign That might make a difference Did that single time Really make this real Put your hand in mine And we'll go the distance Bridge .................. .................. ........ .................. .................. .................. Instrumental (Bridge Progression) V3 Outro Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 31, 2016 Members Share Posted July 31, 2016 Nice. The harmonies gave me a slight feeling of harking back to Crosby, Stills & Nash, which is a good thing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted July 31, 2016 Author Members Share Posted July 31, 2016 Yes,,,and thanks, Lee. They were down and dirty from an old TC Helicon harmonizer unit. The feeling is right......when the time comes I'll see about some real harmonies and maybe bury those TC ones in deep as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 2, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 2, 2016 Intro (Instrumental) V1 Place your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Stop the hands of time And we'll close the deal This was so hard to find But still something's missing V2 Have you seen a sign That might make a difference Did that single time Really make this real Put your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Bridge .................. .................. ........ .................. .................. .................. Instrumental (Bridge Progression) V3 Have you noticed My persistence Have you seen that I'm still here Put your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Outro (Possible Lyrics) Looks like around 3:50. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rickidoo Posted August 2, 2016 Members Share Posted August 2, 2016 Me likes the subtle pauses in the verses. I do like 'close the distance' over 'go the distance'... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 2, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 2, 2016 I do like 'close the distance' over 'go the distance'... Thanks for that feedback. I think that title and line gets to the feeling of the song better and it's best if I don't use both...as I was. Things tend to evolve for me during this process. Often times the song's real intent comes into focus during this writing process leading to substantive lyric changes that can sometimes take my songs in directions that I had not planned. This one, though, came with a direction. Need to get something happening in that bridge now. That tends to be a place where the message of the song gets boiled down......and so far I'm coming up empty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tbry Posted August 5, 2016 Members Share Posted August 5, 2016 Bridge idea...maybe, hope you don't mind my suggs...just ignore me if putting words in your song isn't cool. I know you didn't askAnd it may be out of lineIt felt like this is somewhereWe were headed if you dared Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 6, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 6, 2016 That kind of input is exactly what I was hoping for actually. Thanks. It's not....quite right, though. I'm thinking the opposite feeling although your lyrics have given me a place to start with the bridge,,,, Hmmmmm I know we didn't ask For this thin slice of time And it will fade away Are we up to the task Can we take this thing somewhere It is fading fast I can read your mind Can we find a way That's not quite right either........but it's closer than I was this morning. Here is the music for the bridge... http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13429146&q=hi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tbry Posted August 6, 2016 Members Share Posted August 6, 2016 Cool,...only thing I see now is Time...you used it in the first verse and second verse. Unless that is your intended theme. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 6, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 6, 2016 Time is one part of the theme,....an important part, actually. I'll sing that in tomorrow and see how it sounds.......I'd love to hear other ideas as well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tbry Posted August 6, 2016 Members Share Posted August 6, 2016 Ok, then it may be that having it in the 3rd verse would complete that particular thought process. When creating though, it is entirely up to the creator to have in or out what they want or see. It is coming along nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 14, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 14, 2016 Thanks to all who followed this one......especially to tbry for helping me over the bridge Close The Distance Place your hand in mineAnd we'll close the distanceStop the hands of timeAnd we'll close the deal Have you seen a sign That might make a differenceDid that single timeReally make this realPut your hand in mineAnd we'll close the distance I know we didn't askFor this thin slice of timeWill it fade away Are we up to the taskCan we take this thing somewhere It's fading fastI can read your mindCan we find a way Have you noticedMy persistenceHave you seen that I'm still herePut your hand in mine And we'll close the distance Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tbry Posted August 17, 2016 Members Share Posted August 17, 2016 Another song in the can...your unique style brings it to life. Good one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted August 27, 2016 Members Share Posted August 27, 2016 Well, I missed the development of this one entirely, but the finished product sounds great. Classic LeonardScaper. Hope all is well! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted August 31, 2016 Author Members Share Posted August 31, 2016 Hey bee3......good to see you again and thanks for checking this one out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.