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Delmont

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Crass and shameless, I know. Just an impulse. While web-studying Sennheiser e945 mics, I landed on a website I'd never heard of. They were running an anyone-can-enter songwriting contest. I ain't no Bobby Zimmerman (who the hell is?), but I figured it was too easy to resist. Sent 'em this:

 

http://www.thefullertons.net/uploads/1/3/1/2/13125528/the_monkeys_business.mp3

 

The words:

Hopped a freight train in Seattle,

I was bound for Buffalo.

Turned out the car was occupied:

A bandy-legged ‘bo

was deep in conversation

with an itinerant chimpanzee.

They were tending to a bottle.

The hobo offered it to me.

 

The chimp was saying, “Lookee here,

one more thing you should know --

ancient wisdom late acquired

while escaping Kokomo:

Keep your eye upon the key ring,

and not upon the lock,

keep an ace beneath your fez

and a razor in your sock.

 

I passed the chimp the bottle.

He said, “Here’s blood in your pie,”

and took a mighty swallow.

A flame lept to his eye.

Dogs and cats were plummeting.

He said, “Midnight is near.

Who could calculate the odds against

the fates that brought us here,

 

the fates that brought us here,

the fates that brought us here,

the fates that brought us here,

the fates that brought us here.

He said, “I’ve rode the rods for many a night,

but this might be my last.

One day I knew a thing or two,

but that day is long past.

I’ve considered many questions,

but cannot fathom why

such misfortunes must befall us

before monkeys learn to fly.”

 

He passed the ‘bo the bottle,

said, “Here’s to good times, Joe,”

drew a gold watch from his waistcoat

and tossed it to the ‘bo.

“Thank you kindly,” said the hobo, “but

you need this more than I.”

 

The monkey grinned, rolled wide the door,

and lept into the sky,

and vanished in the darkness

and the pounding of the rain,

leaving us the bottle and

a few things to explain:

What was that monkey’s business?

Was his sacrifice in vain?

We pondered the imponderable

‘cross mountain, town and plain,

 

mountain, town and plain,

mountain, town and plain,

mountain, town and plain,

mountain, town and plain.

 

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Light a candle for me! (And excuse me while I go break a leg....)

 

Del

http://www.thefullertons.net

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The lyric is extraordinary ("here's blood in your pie"...nice), I could never write something like that, but you *really* need a melody. This needs to be sung. Your spoken voice is OK but not that engaging over time, sorry...it would take a Leonard Cohen to pull something like this off spoken.

 

Write a melody and sing it. Great work.

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