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past the time

of future found these grey blocks here

a smooth stone bench to hold me while

the eastern hills just disappear

I turn the music down

every song about you somehow

a splash of blonde within a crowd

the voice I can't quite hear now

dry scent of flower petals pressed

between the pages of a book

the poet dead three hundred years

 

bright blue fine spring sky above me

nothing down below

something to hold on to

I will my hands to open

and feel them letting go

 

 

can't explain

the strange and awkward things I do

standing in a cemetary

I wanted to be close to you

and maybe oh God knows

maybe somehow you will hear me

maybe I could say I'm sorry

I can write a little song

I will leave it here like flowers

just to say that I have missed you

more than you will ever know

 

big bright fine spring sky above me

nothing down below

something to hold on to

I will my hands to open

and feel them letting go

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It's beautiful... and sad. I love it. The only thing that that struck me,

 

"And maybe you will know" or "I know you'll understand"

 

instead of

 

More than you will ever know

 

It sounds like you are addressing the passed directly so... maybe now's your chance to let them know. It beautiful.

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This song is not about anybody dead, dying, or gonna die. :eek:

 

It's about a babe I used to meet in a graveyard. :cool:

 

Graveyards are sweet, like parks, but without all the people. :idea:

 

It is a sad song, I'll admit. :(

 

It's a love song. :love:

 

That's the way they go sometimes. :)

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This song is not about anybody dead, dying, or gonna die.
:eek:

It's about a babe I used to meet in a graveyard.
:cool:

Graveyards are sweet, like parks, but without all the people.
:idea:

It is a sad song, I'll admit.
:(

It's a love song.
:love:

That's the way they go sometimes.
:)

 

Might want to consider clarifying that part. :)

 

KAC

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Might want to consider clarifying that part.
:)

KAC

 

Maybe another verse; "next time let's meet at the Dairy Queen, and skip the goth makeup, honey, 'cuz after three washes I can't get it out of my underwear..." something like that. :D

 

 

 

I think it's important for me to be able to live comfortably with the various interpretations apt to arise from a piece. So I have to say to myself, if everybody thinks this is about a dead person, will that bother me? If so, how can I prevent that reading of the work?

 

In this case I failed to do these things.

 

Thanks for all of your feedback. :)

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This is why I think sometimes it is better not to explain the meanings of songs to others. Even though the story of the song was very clear to me before, as and after it was written, I quite like that others come up with their own storylines to fit the piece as written, and this probably has much to do with why I write the way I do.


Both in painting and lyric I sometimes enjoy creating the freedom of interpretation that abstraction allows.


And really, what is gained by me making everything totally clear every time? Nothing. This is an emotional song, not a naturalistic narrative. My interpretation of the piece is no more inherently valuable than the interpretation of others, except perhaps to me.


Nobody said if they like the part where the protagonist hangs himself. Twice.
:D

I think it's more important for me to be able to live comfortably with the various interpretations apt to arise from a piece. Once it's out there it takes on a life of its own. So I have to say to myself, if everybody thinks this is about a dead person, will that bother me? If so, how can I prevent that reading of the work?


In this case I failed to do these things.


Thanks for all of your feedback.
:)

 

I agree some of the best lyrics leave the interpretation to the listener, this bring the listener in from a passive role to an active role and this is what makes great songwriting.

 

KAC

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Don't explain. Just understand that everyone that interprets it will think you mourning a death. Your use of this... :eek:

 

...implies this surprises you. It shouldn't. I like the idea of the graveyard tying in with the end of a friendship or relationship anyway. Intended or not. But there again, you can't be surprised of someone makes that leap either. Who cares if it "really happened", the meeting in the graveyard. It's image provokes certain mental associations. I can't believe you didn't realize that.

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