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Broken Toys - Opinions?


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V - She wears a painted smile upon her face

Her eyes look to the floor

And she prays that she can hold this masquerade

The tears swell in her eyes

Destroy disguise

Expose the lies that make her cry

Her mother turns her head the other way

Well I have seen the movie

I have read the book

Seem to know the ending

Before it begins, i know

What's at the end

 

P - What's going on behind closed doors?

No one cares to ask

No one wants to know

 

C - No what's done is done

And hindsight heals her none

Jaded love and broken toys

Til someday he finds

Lead between his eyes

Jaded love and broken toys

 

V - Her legs are covered colours black and blue

She says from falling down

But just can't seem to look you in the eye

She hides when she can hear

That daddy's near

The smell of fear

A falling tear

Joins the river formed around her feet

 

B - Repress the scenes playing in her dreams

Points the gun to her head

Now she will do what daddy never did

Put his baby daughter to bed

 

Good night

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Harrowing lyrics.

 

It starts off making me think of Bowie's "Is There Life on Mars?" -- the misunderstood daughter, the unseen narrator's reference to seeing the movie before -- but moves well past that to the grim and brutal finality of the, in this case, presumably inevitable conclusion.

 

I'm not sure how this would work with music but it's a powerful story.

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Harrowing lyrics.


It starts off making me think of Bowie's "Is There Life on Mars?" -- the misunderstood daughter, the unseen narrator's reference to seeing the movie before -- but moves well past that to the grim and brutal finality of the, in this case, presumably inevitable conclusion.


I'm not sure how this would work with music but it's a powerful story.

 

 

thanks mate. yeah, i'm pretty proud of the song as a whole right now, got all the melodies down and the music i've written for it is dark but powerful. Thanks for the kind words, I appreciate it

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Kind of melodramatic. Could work with the right music - here is an example:

 

I am doll eyes

Doll mouth, doll legs

I am doll arms, big veins, dog bait

Yeah, they really want you, they really want you, they really do

Yeah, they really want you, they really want you, but I do too

I want to be the girl with the most cake

I love him so much it just turns to hate

I fake it so real, I am beyond fake

And someday, you will ache like I ache

Someday, you will ache like I ache

 

I am doll parts

Bad skin, doll heart

It stands for knife

For the rest of my life

Yeah, they really want you, they really want you, they really do

Yeah, they really want you, they really want you, but I do, too

I want to be the girl with the most cake

He only loves those things because he loves to see them break

I fake it so real, I am beyond fake

And someday, you will ache like I ache

Someday you will ache like I ache

 

Doll Parts - Courtney Love

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