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I wrote a song the other day that is incredibly simple, both musically and lyically. Whenever I read some of the lyrics I see on here, I get a little paranoid that mine are so shallow. I guess the threads about happy songs, and songs for girlfriends must have inspired this. I hope to get a crude recording of this up soon. Do you think these are too simple, and/or is there a place for simple songs?

 

I DIG GIRLS

 

I dig girls in shopping malls

Who wear high heels to make them tall

And I dig girls who watch football

And stick around until last call

 

I dig girls with nerdy glasses

Who take my notes in all my classes

They have tattoos above their asses

And don't go around making passes

 

But most of all, I dig you

Yeah baby, I dig you

 

I dig girls in business clothes

Who wear those rings around their toes

And I dig girls who watch my shows

And let me hang out with my bros

 

I dig girls with bony knees

And ones who don't give me STD's

And I dig girls who aim to please

And say "God bless you" when I sneeze

 

But most of all, I dig you

Yeah baby, I dig you

 

I dig girls who play guitar

And don't mind that I drive a {censored}ty car

And I dig girls who smile, by far

And make a wish on a shooting star

 

Well I dig girls who drink my brew

Whose hair smells like some sweet shampoo

And now it's time I think you knew

That I dig girls who dig me too

 

Yeah baby, you know I dig you

Yeah baby, I really dig you

Yeah baby, you know I dig you

Yeah baby, I really dig you

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Simplicity is not always bad, and complexity is not always good. Like Elias said, it's all about the context of the song. I actually quite like the lyrics, and think that if you surround it with the right elements, you could have a pretty fun song. Some lines are better than others, imo, but i think this song could be made to work.

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these are great, don't sweat it. I think yours are way better than these:

 

Beastie Boys:

Girls - all I really want is girls

And in the morning it's girls

Cause in the evening it's girls

 

I like the way that they walk

And it's chill to hear them talk

And I can always make them smile

From White Castle to the Nile

 

Back in the day

There was this girl around the way

She liked my home-piece M.C.A.

He said he would not give her play

I asked him, "Please?" - he said, "You may."

Her pants were tight and that's ok

If she would dance - I would D.J.

We took a walk down to the bay

 

I hope she'll say, "Hey me and you should hit the hay!"

I asked her out - she said, "No way!"

I should have probably guessed her gay

So I broke North with no delay

I heard she moved real far away

That was two years ago this May

I seen her just the other day

Jockin' Mike D. to my dismay

 

Girls - to do the dishes

Girls - to clean up my room

Girls - to do the laundry

Girls - and in the bathroom

Girls - that's all I really want is girls

Two at a time - I want girls

With new wave hairdos - I want girls

I ought to whip out my - girls, girls, girls, girls, girls!

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I love simple lyrics. In my opinion (which is going to be wildly unpopular), too many people try to write lyrics that have deeper meanings or cram as many literary elements as they can into a verse and a chorus. That's great and all, if you do it well - very few do. Others, like say, Johnny Cash, can write a song with some pretty point blank lyrics and sing them with some attitude and make it sounds like the bees knees. If you try and do things the first way, and fail, you end up sounding kind of pretentious (hell, you might even if you do it right) - on the flip side it could also be pretty cool if you do it right. Simple is always nice though, people can relate and just feel the music instead of having to look into it.

 

 

Just my (rambling) two cents. I'm sure not everyone agrees, and that's totally cool too.

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I love the fact that the song is sung to a girl and that the singer has the audacity to tell the girl that he digs her even though the entire song is about the fact that he digs all girls period. There's a wonderful devil-may-care arrogance to it that makes it all work.

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I wrote a song the other day that is incredibly simple, both musically and lyically. Whenever I read some of the lyrics I see on here, I get a little paranoid that mine are so shallow. I guess the threads about happy songs, and songs for girlfriends must have inspired this. I hope to get a crude recording of this up soon. Do you think these are too simple, and/or is there a place for simple songs?


I DIG GIRLS


I dig girls in shopping malls

Who wear high heels to make them tall

And I dig girls who watch football

And stick around until last call


I dig girls with nerdy glasses

Who take my notes in all my classes

They have tattoos above their asses

And don't go around making passes


But most of all, I dig you

Yeah baby, I dig you


I dig girls in business clothes

Who wear those rings around their toes

And I dig girls who watch my shows

And let me hang out with my bros


I dig girls with bony knees

And ones who don't give me STD's

And I dig girls who aim to please

And say "God bless you" when I sneeze


But most of all, I dig you

Yeah baby, I dig you


I dig girls who play guitar

And don't mind that I drive a {censored}ty car

And I dig girls who smile, by far

And make a wish on a shooting star


Well I dig girls who drink my brew

Whose hair smells like some sweet shampoo

And now it's time I think you knew

That I dig girls who dig me too


Yeah baby, you know I dig you

Yeah baby, I really dig you

Yeah baby, you know I dig you

Yeah baby, I really dig you

 

 

I think it's really strong, with excellent attention to pattern and form. It's got strong images, funny ideas, it uses the power of paradox (girls with tattoos on their asses who don't make passes) with assuredness and good humor.

 

It's funny, it's smart.

 

If the music is as good as the lyrics and the implied structure, I think it'll be the kind of irresistibly fun little song that can make life a little sunnier for more than its three minutes.

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