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pour me back to the bottle

bang the cap on tight

pour me back to the bottle

bang the cap on tight

put me on the high shelf honey

don't want me tonight

 

roll out the highway

find you another man

roll out the highway

find you another man

done is done is everthing

all I understand

 

never did any

things you said you will

never did any

things you said you will

know it doesn't matter

don't believe you still

 

crossed my heart Baby

know I hope to die

crossed my heart Baby

know I hope to die

me and you honey

know the reason why

 

lay me out honey

in the sun to dry

lay me out honey

in the sun to dry

leave me here Baby

just a little while

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I could see this working as a PJ Harvey/country blues kind of track. On the page there's a lot of repetition, but the individual lines are pretty concrete - there's not some extra meaning that gets teased out the second time around. I think the whole thing could profitably be reduced to:

 

Screw the cap on the bottle baby

And lay me out to dry

Put the bottle back up on that high shelf

And leave me here a while.

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pour me back to the bottle

bang the cap on tight

pour me back to the bottle

bang the cap on tight

put me on the high shelf honey

don't want me tonight


roll out the highway

find you another man

roll out the highway

find you another man

done is done is everthing

all I understand


never did any

things you said you will

never did any

things you said you will

know it doesn't matter

don't believe you still


crossed my heart Baby

know I hope to die

crossed my heart Baby

know I hope to die

me and you honey

know the reason why


lay me out honey

in the sun to dry

lay me out honey

in the sun to dry

leave me here Baby

just a little while

 

 

I love it. And personally, I think you might do it a disservice to slap a blues on it and call it a day. I say bend the 12 bar form. Resist using a I IV V. TO have written a blues and done something different with it, that's Tom Waits territory. And a good place if you ask me.

 

The last verse seems slightly out of place. Though I love the verse itself... the story feels complete ending at the verse prior. Just a thought.

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I love it. And personally, I think you might do it a disservice to slap a blues on it and call it a day. I say bend the 12 bar form. Resist using a I IV V. TO have written a blues and done something different with it, that's Tom Waits territory. And a good place if you ask me.


The last verse seems slightly out of place. Though I love the verse itself... the story feels complete ending at the verse prior. Just a thought.

 

 

I wrote the verses in the reverse of the order they appear here, then tried to figure out what goes where. May need to look at it again in that regard.

I like the idea of doing something different with it since to do it as a straight blues - the music would write itself, already has, but it's not worth doing. I like the thought that it should be unexpected or break the mold in some respect. Thanks.

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