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Newbie - Please Take a Look at My Music (THANKS!)


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i was pretty scared when i read "ukulele" but that was actually really cool!

 

the second lines in your verses, like "Feet can get stuck in the sand." and "And with each passing wave," strike me as shoehorned, think about cutting a syllable to smooth it out?

 

nice 'n jaunty, happy little lyrics, i'd say you've got a decent tune there.

 

on the second tune, good concept, maybe mix it up when you get into the end of the first verse, "and put another down" "one more to drown" etc etc

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I listened to "Jack's Song", and although the Ukulele sounds out of tune at times, and the audio quality is a bit compressed, you can still tell how great this song is. It's got a great beat to it, and the melodies are wonderful, the singing is spot on and emotional. The song has great structure, it is not boring or repetitive. I would love to hear a proper recording of this song sometime!

 

-Jeff

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Thanks for giving these a listen. The clicky sound is the camcorder (digital camera to be exact) I believe. I tend to like to tap my feet when I play, to keep the beat. When I do that, I sometimes, either shake the digital camera or that is picked up.

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