Members indie rocker Posted December 31, 2004 Members Posted December 31, 2004 http://www.purevolume.com/download.php?id=395976right-click on the link above and click 'save target as' just finished the new demo today
Members Kent3 Posted January 6, 2005 Members Posted January 6, 2005 Here's my totally honest opinion (and I'm hard on myself - I won't even post anything of mine). I think it's very good. Your voice is good, your guitar playing is steady. I think I'd cut back the echo on the vox just a bit. Make it a little less obvious that it is there. Then bring it forward a bit more in the part where you are singing a lot harder. It would make for a nice variation in the song, and give it more depth. Where's the chorus? I think the We Are Strange would make a good chorus that I would use 2-3 times in the song. Especially it would be nice if it shifted gears from the chord progression you stick with in the song. I like the way the dynamics build from the beginning to the solo and then back off. I think the guitar solo needs to be a little less aggressive to fit the mood of the song better. It might even be nice if the song shifted back a bit in the intensity for the solo - it'd be a nice dynamic shift. You could then kick it back up for a big ending. Lyrics are kick-ass. Really top notch. So take those dynamics and build to a nice high-pitched chorus and you are to be a top ten hit. Just remember we all knew you when!
Members indie rocker Posted January 7, 2005 Author Members Posted January 7, 2005 Originally posted by Kent3 Here's my totally honest opinion (and I'm hard on myself - I won't even post anything of mine). I think it's very good. Your voice is good, your guitar playing is steady. I think I'd cut back the echo on the vox just a bit. Make it a little less obvious that it is there. Then bring it forward a bit more in the part where you are singing a lot harder. It would make for a nice variation in the song, and give it more depth.Where's the chorus? I think the We Are Strange would make a good chorus that I would use 2-3 times in the song. Especially it would be nice if it shifted gears from the chord progression you stick with in the song. I like the way the dynamics build from the beginning to the solo and then back off.I think the guitar solo needs to be a little less aggressive to fit the mood of the song better. It might even be nice if the song shifted back a bit in the intensity for the solo - it'd be a nice dynamic shift. You could then kick it back up for a big ending.Lyrics are kick-ass. Really top notch.So take those dynamics and build to a nice high-pitched chorus and you are to be a top ten hit. Just remember we all knew you when! thanks man. That song just originated out of 2 chords, there's a chorus there, but it's only lyrical. It was a song I wrote for an old band, and I played electric and had another guitarist on the song, so I just did a simple dumbed-down version of it. thanks for the constructive critisism, and the kind words:)
Members geek_usa Posted January 9, 2005 Members Posted January 9, 2005 i like it. sorry that was not much help, but keep up the good work, indie rocker!!!
Members indie rocker Posted January 9, 2005 Author Members Posted January 9, 2005 Originally posted by geek_usa i like it. sorry that was not much help, but keep up the good work, indie rocker!!! thanks:)
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