The result of your criticism... Version 2!

[onetubetone]

Thanks to all you guys who listened to the latest song I recorded, called Misery, and gave me very helpful suggestions. I tried to follow them as much as possible and put a lot more time into the song and re-recorded it. Tell me what you think!

 

Misery Version 2

 

 

Here's the old version if anyone wants to listen to refresh your memory.

 

Misery Old Version

[pipedwho]

I like the intro and nice use of stereo effects. The vocals sound much better now that you've backed away from the microphone.

 

Oh, and great playing too!

[d03nut]

Yeah, I don't feel "misery" from this song.......and I mean that in a good way. Better than the first version.......oh yeah......

 

Just that to my ears the guitar was just a tad too "stereo", almost like there's too much delay between the sound coming from the left & right channels. I don't know if this was a "true" stereo recording of your acoustic or you "copy/delayed" the part.

 

Or maybe I just don't know what I'm talking about. Either way I liked it......

[onetubetone]

Thankyou both, haha I've never really had trouble with my guitar playing, it always takes me like twice as long to do vocals as the guitar tracks haha. Actually, do3nut, it is a true stereo recording with 2 different guitars panned left and right. The one panned 50% left is my Larrivee strummed with a pick, the other is panned 75% right and is my old yamaha played with my fingers. Haha but you do know what you're talking about... I had trouble syncing the two parts exactly and still having the strumming sound playful. If you listen, though, it gets much tighter as the song goes along... best I could do in the timeframe Thanks very much for listening.

[suprswd]

did you write this song?

 

its pretty good man.

 

i actually like it better than bob dylan stuff

 

reminds me of it a bit though.

 

lol.

 

 

~Logan

[Old_Joe_Clark]

:thu:

[onetubetone]

reminds me of it a bit though.

 

maybe it's the out of tune vocals haha but thnx, yeah it's original.

[MyM.O.]

You did a good job on this version. It started off really strong. I think that some parts still get a little breathy and weak, and don't sound as good. I lke your voice when it's stronger and more assured.

 

It's great that you took the critiquing of others for the value that was there and improved your song and performance .

[Sweb]

Originally posted by MyM.O. You did a good job on this version. It started off really strong. I think that some parts still get a little breathy and weak, and don't sound as good. I lke your voice when it's stronger and more assured. It's great that you took the critiquing of others for the value that was there and improved your song and performance .

 

+1 on the punchier voice.

[dazed1]

BREATH my pasty friend. Good tune. I think the out of sync stereo thing kinda threw me a little bit. It does get tighter later. Like the other guys say, your vocals are fine when you let it out. It is hard to explain, but I understand some parts are supposed to be uber mellow, but you can still "emote" at that level. A few breathing tips from somebody who knows (not me) what the heck they are doing and you will be just fine. Good tune man. One, more thing- are you standing or sitting when doing the vocals?

[JasmineTea]

I'd give it a listen but this computer I'm using does'nt seem to have very good sound, makes everything sound distorted. My old computer, the one that exploded, had a nice sound to it, nice and clean. If I can debug this thing I'll give a listen.