Ever Been

[tony333]

Wrote and roughly recorded this while on vacation.

 

 

 

 

 

Ever Been

 

VI

 

If I said

I love you

In a thousand different ways

 

Or lassoed

The truth

Just for you to give away

 

If I climbed

Highest hills

And I parted all the seas

 

If I gathered

The stars

Tell me then would you believe

 

Tell me then

Tell me then

Would you believe

 

VII

 

If I swayed

The moon

Into giving tides freewill

 

And suspended

All of time

Making all the clocks stand still

 

If I talked

The sky

Into only setting suns

 

Little darling You would know

You've ever been the only one

 

Youve ever been

You've ever been

The only one

 

VIII

 

if I persuaded

Gravity

Into simply letting go

 

Or whispered

To the wind

Convincing it to never blow

 

If I talked

The sky

Into only setting suns

 

Little darlin

You would know

You've ever been the only one

 

You've ever been

You've ever been

The only one

 

[Idunno]

Actually, I'm not connecting the undoing of natural things with a display or love. I would connect it with an unnatural force messing around with nature but that's where it stops. Now, should you write about undoing all those natural things as deeds to prove love, then it has to be connected in a manner that we understand and not a reach.

In Scarborough Fair, the lyrics "Tell her to make me a cambric shirt. Without no seams or needle work. Then she'll be a true love of mine." is similar to your flow of impossible deeds so I'm guessing there's some influence there. But, even that song doesn't jump right out and elicit love. Who needs someone to perform impossible deeds as a show of love? That's counter intuitive. If anything, I see it as a way to ensure that love does not develop. It's like saying I'll love you when monkeys fly out of your butt.

Like I said, love needs to be connected to deeds one would associate with enticing it.

I do like the minimized lyric style, though, and try to use it when I can.

[tony333]

So what I was trying to convey was from the perspective of someone who has shown their love and the person still questions that fact. And that if they were able to do these things, would that person then believe that the love was true.

[IronKnee]

Hey there Tony, I really like the line about the moon being persuaded into giving the tides their free will. That's a real good line and, quite possibly, a very unique one, as well.

Not so easy to come up with little gems, like that.

Anyways, You have some good stuff to work with, and I would say you have a great start!

Keep on.....

                                  😎-Tom