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  • Rough Demo (kinda weird pop)

    Hello folks

    Long time since i've been here

    So I had this idea for a pop song that just came from nowhere, took 10 mins to write and a quick rough track demo.

    I don't even think I like it but it's so different to what I do that I don't know

    Any thoughts?

    https://soundcloud.com/stickboy/freaky-love-demo

    Freaky Love.

    When you need something more
    just stay outside of this room
    I've already given my all
    There's nothing more for you

    But still you take it so badly
    Don't you know I need you so madly
    I do.
    Too many secrets, too many mistakes
    But you are my weakness
    You're already puttin' me out
    You're already puttin' me out

    You say you'll come to my room
    I've seen so many of you
    I'm pulling out, you're putting in
    Wherever I go, I dunno
    It's kinda funny
    but it's something to show how I feel

    Don't you know how I feel
    I'm feeling kind of wierd

    Freaky love don't put me under covers
    No your freaky love won't put me under covers
    You're always tryin to pull me under your covers
    But I don't do freaky love
    No I don't do freaky love

    I don't want your freaky love
    I don't want your freaky love
    ​​​​​​​I don't want your freaky love
    ​​​​​​​I don't want your freaky love

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  • #2
    Nice, the only thing I would do is hit em with the chorus earlier.

    Love your stuff, by the way


    Freaky Love.

    Verse 1
    When you need something more
    just stay outside of this room
    I've already given my all
    There's nothing more for you

    Verse2 w/ heart beat drum thing)
    But still you take it so badly
    Don't you know I need you so madly
    I do.
    Too many secrets, too many mistakes
    But you are my weakness
    You're already puttin' me out
    You're already puttin' me out

    1st Chorus
    Freaky love don't put me under covers
    No your freaky love won't put me under covers
    You're always tryin to pull me under your covers
    But I don't do freaky love
    No I don't do freaky love

    Verse 3
    You say you'll come to my room
    I've seen so many of you
    I'm pulling out, you're putting in
    Wherever I go, I dunno
    It's kinda funny
    but it's something to show how I feel

    Don't you know how I feel
    I'm feeling kind of weird

    2nd chorus
    Freaky love don't put me under covers
    No your freaky love won't put me under covers
    You're always tryin to pull me under your covers
    But I don't do freaky love
    No I don't do freaky love

    I don't want your freaky love
    I don't want your freaky love
    ​​​​​​​I don't want your freaky love
    ​​​​​​​I don't want your freaky love


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    • #3
      Cheers dude

      Yeh.....i certainly considered doing the chorus earlier.....but then I thought IF i record it properly maybe more of a build in music will carry it til the chorus at the end.....its just over a simple 3 chord progression with little else at the moment

      Having said that.....you're probably right

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      • #4
        Welcome back Stickboy! How you been? Haven't you seen you here in a long while.

        I'm liking the vibe of this song, even the autotuned vocals. Light arrangement but suits it well. Definitely another Stickboy classic. lol

        Nothing really to add except that I feel like the chorus needs more energy or something to lift off from the verse.

        Anyway, cool to hear from you again. Hope to here more songs from you. Cheers.
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        • #5
          Love the melancholy organ. Sadness conveyed.
          "Now and then... occasionally... it seems to have.... too many notes"

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          • #6
            Do you slip into a Scots accent in the chorus? Freaky loaf?
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            • #7
              Originally posted by blue2blue View Post
              Do you slip into a Scots accent in the chorus? Freaky loaf?
              Are you still here

              Ha I think it's just my northerness coming through (LUV)

              Hope all is good sir

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              • #8
                Originally posted by stickboymusic View Post

                Are you still here

                Ha I think it's just my northerness coming through (LUV)

                Hope all is good sir
                Just movin' a little slower, is all...
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                • #9
                  As always very well done. The only thing I would add is that when I read it before listening, it "played" at a much faster tempo.

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