Members tony333 Posted June 24, 2017 Members Share Posted June 24, 2017 Work in process lyrics and music. Havent had a chance to record yet. Here are the lyrics though- Let Your Heart Believe Woke up feeling like I lost a friendthe rain outside clouds my mindturns me inside out againAnd I don't know the reason whyNo matter how hard I try Don't think that I'll ever be the sameEvery time I learn the rulesLife will change the gameNo one said that it was fairI'm just a little worse for wear Don't call me a loserCause I won't let it winKeep falling off of this rideBut I get back on again You might say I'm crazy Cause I wear it on my sleeveThe only way to know loveis to let your heart believeGot to let your heart believe Spread my wings and try to flyRide the wind into the sky This old world keeps racing byI'm just holding on for dear life Don't call me a loserCause I won't let it winKeep falling off of this rideBut I get back on again You might say I'm crazy Cause I wear it on my sleeveThe only way to know loveis to let your heart believeGot to let your heart believe Sometimes home don't feel the way it shouldwords and liesand alibiesFeeling misunderstoodBut I still hold the hope of timeThink I'll make it through just fine Don't call me a loserCause I won't let it winKeep falling off of this rideBut I get back on again You might say I'm crazy Cause I wear it on my sleeveThe only way to know loveis to let your heart believeGot to let your heart believe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted June 24, 2017 Members Share Posted June 24, 2017 Tony - it's always difficult to critique a lyric without music, but I'm just going to suggest a couple of small changes to the chorus because I think it may have a smoother flow once you try singing it. Don't call me a loserCause I won't let it winKeep falling off this ride (deleted word 'of')But I get back on again You might say I'm crazy Cause I wear it on my sleeveThe only way to know loveis to let your heart believeLet your heart believe (deleted words 'Got to') Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mbfrancis Posted June 29, 2017 Members Share Posted June 29, 2017 This is strong as is. There aren't any lines here which blow me away, or really stand out, but it's all solid. All the sentiments are fairly conventional, and said fairly conventionally. I would want to hear the music, though. Music could make this a cool standout or insipid. Hope this helps. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 2, 2017 Members Share Posted July 2, 2017 This is strong as is. There aren't any lines here which blow me away' date=' or really stand out, but it's all solid. ... Music could make this a cool standout or insipid.[/quote'] Lyrically, I think this section is a bit trite.could easily be deleted: Spread my wings and try to fly Ride the wind into the sky This old world keeps racing by I'm just holding on for dear life The rest is good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tony333 Posted July 29, 2017 Author Members Share Posted July 29, 2017 Thank you for the input. The problem, as always, is that my playing is limited at best and my voice is worse. I have no theory training so I playing by feel and guess work. I think the tempo needs to be stepped up a bit and I might add some short breaks in between versus and between versus and chorus. Here it is with just me and my guitar. If anyone ever wants to take one of these things and run with it, feel free. Id love to hear it. https://soundcloud.com/user-88657508...rt-believe-717 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 29, 2017 Members Share Posted July 29, 2017 This version is much better. The only thing I can think of right now is that the "don't call me loser" section (or chorus) is too similar to the rest of the song and it needs a change of tempo or key change, or both. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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