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Let Your Heart Believe


tony333

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Work in process lyrics and music. Havent had a chance to record yet. Here are the lyrics though-

 

Let Your Heart Believe

 

Woke up feeling like I lost a friend

the rain outside

clouds my mind

turns me inside out again

And I don't know the reason why

No matter how hard I try

 

 

Don't think that I'll ever be the same

Every time I learn the rules

Life will change the game

No one said that it was fair

I'm just a little worse for wear

 

 

Don't call me a loser

Cause I won't let it win

Keep falling off of this ride

But I get back on again

 

You might say I'm crazy

Cause I wear it on my sleeve

The only way to know love

is to let your heart believe

Got to let your heart believe

 

 

Spread my wings and try to fly

Ride the wind into the sky

 

This old world keeps racing by

I'm just holding on for dear life

 

Don't call me a loser

Cause I won't let it win

Keep falling off of this ride

But I get back on again

 

You might say I'm crazy

Cause I wear it on my sleeve

The only way to know love

is to let your heart believe

Got to let your heart believe

 

 

 

Sometimes home don't feel the way it should

words and lies

and alibies

Feeling misunderstood

But I still hold the hope of time

Think I'll make it through just fine

 

 

Don't call me a loser

Cause I won't let it win

Keep falling off of this ride

But I get back on again

 

You might say I'm crazy

Cause I wear it on my sleeve

The only way to know love

is to let your heart believe

Got to let your heart believe

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Tony - it's always difficult to critique a lyric without music, but I'm just going to suggest a couple of small changes to the chorus because I think it may have a smoother flow once you try singing it.

 

Don't call me a loser

Cause I won't let it win

Keep falling off this ride (deleted word 'of')

But I get back on again

 

You might say I'm crazy

Cause I wear it on my sleeve

The only way to know love

is to let your heart believe

Let your heart believe (deleted words 'Got to')

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This is strong as is. There aren't any lines here which blow me away, or really stand out, but it's all solid. All the sentiments are fairly conventional, and said fairly conventionally. I would want to hear the music, though. Music could make this a cool standout or insipid. Hope this helps.

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This is strong as is. There aren't any lines here which blow me away' date=' or really stand out, but it's all solid. ... Music could make this a cool standout or insipid.[/quote']

 

Lyrically, I think this section is a bit trite.could easily be deleted:

 

Spread my wings and try to fly

Ride the wind into the sky

 

This old world keeps racing by

I'm just holding on for dear life

 

The rest is good.

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Thank you for the input. The problem, as always, is that my playing is limited at best and my voice is worse. I have no theory training so I playing by feel and guess work. I think the tempo needs to be stepped up a bit and I might add some short breaks in between versus and between versus and chorus. Here it is with just me and my guitar. If anyone ever wants to take one of these things and run with it, feel free. Id love to hear it.

 

https://soundcloud.com/user-88657508...rt-believe-717

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This version is much better.

 

The only thing I can think of right now is that the "don't call me loser" section (or chorus) is too similar to the rest of the song and it needs a change of tempo or key change, or both.

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