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Working title is Sunshine. Just lyrics and in my head so far.

 

Sunshine

 

 

Out here in the distance the days don't seem to change

Monday turns to Sunday afternoon

 

Everything is burning and we really need the rain

But the sky is just another shade of blue

 

Every time I turn around the wind is in my face

Feeling like I’m pushing straight uphill

 

I have never been the kind to take the easy way

Never have and bet I probably never will

 

Twilight brings the darkness and the walls start closing in

This house feels like one big empty room

 

Moon don't seem to notice and the stars don't seem to care

That all I can think about is you

 

 

chorus

Ohhhhh Sunshine I can’t stand to see you cry

Wash away the sadness with your light

Ohhhh Sunshine will you be mine in time

All we have to do is hold on tight

Oh how I wish I could hold you tight

 

I would give up all my futures for one more dance with you

To hold you in my arms and see you smile

 

Been so lost without you, never sure of my next turn

And I don't think I can make another mile

 

So I lay down and close my eyes but the dreams won’t stay away

About that time we had right after school

 

I reach out to grab your hand but you slowly drift away

Ain't it funny how the wind can be so cruel?

 

I can’t keep you off my mind, these scars don't ever fade

Especially if you never want them to

 

So I just wait and hold on tight, knowing things may never change

I guess there’s really nothing else to do

 

chorus

Ohhhhh Sunshine I can’t stand to see you cry

Wash away the sadness with your light

Ohhhh Sunshine will you be mine in time

All we have to do is hold on tight

Oh how I wish I could hold you tight

 

 

 

Sunshine it don't burn my skin, she warms me from within

Lives inside my heart and in my head

 

I don't think I'll ever learn to turn my eyes away

Every time she sets it takes away my breath

 

 

 

Chorus

Ohhhhh Sunshine I can’t stand to see you cry

Wash away the sadness with your light

Ohhhh Sunshine will you be mine in time

All we have to do is hold on tight

Oh how I wish I could hold you tight

 

 

 

Alt Chorus

Ohhhhh Sunshine I can’t stand to see you cry

Wash away the sadness from your eyes

Ohhhh Sunshine will you be mine in time

All we have to do is hold on tight

I just want to hold you tight

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Very cool. Already singing it. I have it on a melody in my head. Interested in a scratch take of the 1st & chorus? I can bring it here today probably. It would be a welcome diversion from painting my house, better half opinion pending, of course.

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Very cool. Already singing it. I have it on a melody in my head. Interested in a scratch take of the 1st & chorus? I can bring it here today probably. It would be a welcome diversion from painting my house' date=' better half opinion pending, of course.[/quote']

 

That would be cool to hear if your up for it. Can compare to what I hear in my head. thanks

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First 4 lines and chorus. Pretty stiff because I was reading as I recorded.

 

I had a choice between a minor fall or a major lift (Leonard Cohen) and these lyrics seemed more towards the minor fall. Concert pitch in the key of Am.

 

The lyrics all seem to have an essential quality to them. I ran through the whole song a couple times as-is. It gets to be monotonous and needs a key change or other dynamic I could bring into it. But, that would be a waste of time if the current tone and temper of it isn't what you are looking to do.

 

Love to hear what's going on inside your head arrangement/melody-wise.

 

https://app.box.com/s/r6ucsrcahyx5qbwc1pzus076xueimkgc

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First, thanks for doing that. Really cool. And very weird to hear someone else singing words I have written.

 

I have been messing with it a little bit. My playing and "singing" are not nearly as nice as yours. I also don't have any musical or theory training so I mostly pick up a guitar and fumble around until something sounds "right".

 

I have a more "country/americana" sound in my head. Full band for the first 2 verses and choruses and then when it gets to "Sunshine it dont burn my skin....." that is just flat picking acoustic guitar and then full band back at that chorus.

 

When I am playing it right now the verses are D Am7 Em D. I am trying to figure out where to go with the chorus to change it up and add some dynamic. I have also been messing with the tempo and am trying to settle into something.

 

I will try to post at least me singing later today.

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I can hear your progression and arrangement well enough from what you've written. I like the acoustic breakout and return to the band where you placed it. I thought that verse was placed there for something different. Knowing the genre now brings better focus.

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