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"Keep on Dreaming," new version.


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So I came up with this song late last year, and have been fussing with it occasionally till now, and I think I've got it pretty well cooked.

 

 

"Keep on Dreaming"

 

Intro.

I admit that I’ve been absent-minded

since the day you decided we're through.

Feels a bit like my heart has been blinded.

I can't see anything but you…

 

1

If I’m unaware it’s started raining,

if I leave my cell phone in a cab,

if I hear a barkeep keep explaining

“You already paid your tab,”

it’s probably true

I’ve been dreaming of you.

Well, what else can I do

but keep on dreaming?

 

2

If I don’t have the slightest inkling

that I might hum a constant tune,

if all the stars seem to be twinkling

on a sunny afternoon

(repeat refrain)

 

(instrumental)

 

3.

If friends all ask have I been eating,

if I forget to walk the dog,

and if my heart gets tired of beating

and my mind’s a constant fog…

(repeat refrain)

 

Coda

For what good is life without

someone to dream about?

For me that someone is you.

 

Words & Music © 2015 Lee Charles Kelley

West Sixty Ninth Street Music (ASCAP)

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I, for one, want to hear you sing this one, Lee.

 

I always worry about dating a possible classic song with references to current technology.....but I guess cell phones are here to stay.

 

If I hear a barkeep keep explaining.......I think that line is going to sound fabulous.

 

:wave:

 

 

 

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Latest version. And yes, I need to post a recording of the song....

 

 

"Keep on Dreaming"

 

Intro.

I admit that I’ve been absent-minded

since the day you decided we're through.

Feels a bit like my heart has been blinded.

I can't see anything but you…

 

1

If I can't tell that it’s been raining,

'f I leave my cell phone in a cab,

'f I hear a barkeep keep complaining,

“You already paid your tab,”

it’s probably true

I’ve been dreaming of you.

Well, what else can I do

but keep on dreaming?

 

2

'f I haven’t got the slightest inkling

that I forgot to lace my shoes,

and if I hear pianos tinkling

but they only play the blues...

(repeat refrain)

 

(instrumental)

 

3.

If friends all fret that I'm not eating,

if I forget to walk the dog,

and if my heart gets sick of beating

and my mind’s a constant fog…

(repeat refrain)

 

Coda

For what good is life without

someone to dream about?

For me that someone is you.

 

Words & Music © 2017 Lee Charles Kelley

West Sixty Ninth Street Music (ASCAP)

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Some really lovely lines here, Lee, works great as is. V2 is perfect. My only thoughts:

 

I agree that there is tension between the consciously classic/retro language "we're through/barkeep/inkling" and newer elements like cell phone. Maybe add a few *more*modern touches so it becomes more deliberate?

 

Don't think there's any way to address this, but I wish there was a way you could get through the chorus without using the word 'dream' until the title. Just feels the setup to the title could maybe be stronger. (I could be wrong.)

 

Feels like the intro should not reference "seeing" nothing but you, but rather "dreaming" of you, to send us into the song. But that means the blinded line doesn't work.

 

Lovely stuff.

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Don't think there's any way to address this, but I wish there was a way you could get through the chorus without using the word 'dream' until the title. Just feels the setup to the title could maybe be stronger. (I could be wrong.)

 

Thanks for the comments, MB.

 

I tried to see if I could work out the problem you mentioned, but I don't see how.

 

Example:

 

"It's probably true, I've been thinking of you.

But what else can I do but keep on dreaming..."

 

I think "dreaming" has to be repeated.

 

 

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