Members rsadasiv Posted June 8, 2015 Members Share Posted June 8, 2015 Passing Don Julian ElementaryOn the first day of schoolIn the hottest AugustAnybody here remembersDrive each morning through this valleyPast the strip clubs and the landfillAs the longest summer of our livesSlouched on toward SeptemberYou, weighed down by nascent lifeAnd I, by crushing expectationsOf performance that could live upTo a gaudy résuméWaiting at a stop sign, I breatheIn the scent of oleanderMixed with the diesel exhaust thatTakes an hour off my life each day Ancient bougainvillea cascadeOver rusty chainlink fencesThat don't seem to be a barrierTo the local chickens todayNow here comes the old vaqueroWith his boots, spurs, and sombreroRides a brown horse down Third AvenueEvery morning that I come this wayTonsured men with tattooed bicepsHold the hands of six-year-old girlsWearing blue Queen Elsa backpacksFar too laden for their ageOne day soon, I'll be one of themFatter and with slightly less inkThen before I know it, I'll be watchingHer walking across a lighted stage Mark the passage of time by theStrip club billboards by the freewayMonarchs, Synn, and Spearmint RhinoGaudy sirens at the roadsideSpringtime brought hopes of transcendingAll my {censored}up inclinationsAnd a richer, happier lifeHere where we could spread our wings wideBut the summer showed me that I'llNever stop failing you and mySelf in every way that matters'Til we've reached the end of daysGuess I will just have to muddleTake it one long day at a timeThat's what I tell myself as IDrive on through the brownish-yellow haze Passing Don Julian ElementaryOn the first day of schoolIn the hottest AugustAnyone remembers - Peter McFerrin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 8, 2015 Author Members Share Posted June 8, 2015 Passing Don Julian ElementaryOn the first day of schoolThe hottest AugustI can remember Morning drive through the valleyPast the strip clubs and the landfillSlouching on toward BethlehemAnd LA in September Bougainvillea do cascadeThe rusty chainlink fenceAn old vaqueroBoots and sombreroRides Third Avenue Monarchs, Synn, and Spearmint RhinoGaudy sirens at the roadsideFall from summer showed me thatI can’t stop failing you and mySelf each way that matters 'Til we've reached the end of daysIt’s all a daily muddleTake it one day at a timeWith a brownish-yellow haze Passing Don Julian ElementaryOn the first day of schoolThe hottest AugustI can remember Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mbfrancis Posted June 8, 2015 Members Share Posted June 8, 2015 Passing Don Julian Elementary On the first day of school In the hottest August Anybody here remembers Drive each morning through this valley Past the strip clubs and the landfill As the longest summer of our lives Slouched on toward September You, weighed down by nascent life [don't say nascent] And I, by crushing expectations Of performance that could live up To a gaudy résumé Waiting at a stop sign, I breathe In the scent of oleander Mixed with the diesel exhaust that Takes an hour off my life each day Love these lines...just saw you didn't write it...oh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 9, 2015 Author Members Share Posted June 9, 2015 Yes, not mine, but a WIP by an internet buddy (and former HC member) - http://panoramacity.bandcamp.com/album/mobility Lemme get this demo'ed up in the next week or so and I think you'll see what I'm getting at. It's a 2:3 clave rhythm, with three 32-bar verses with 8-bar interludes and a 16-bar double-time bridge. Definitely gonna be a little bit too jäzz for some. Passing Don Julian Elementary On the first day of school is actually Pass-ing Don Hoo-Lee-Ann Ell-eh Men-tuh-ree on the first day of school Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted June 9, 2015 Members Share Posted June 9, 2015 That's really well written. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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