The Voice in Fashion - lyric brainstorm?

[mbfrancis]

OK this is a little different maybe.

 

I write a lot of little electronic ideas, loops really, which often go nowhere, but sometimes (OK rarely) develop into actual songs. Somewhere in between is this thing, which is a loop where I've sketched out a melodic idea I'm pretty happy with, at least as a start. I recorded some nonsense words to document the melody. But there it's stayed for over a year, with no progress.

 

So here's my request - do you guys here anything pop out: either words, phrases, full lines ideas, topics? It's meant to be kind of electro and icy and menacing, maybe a little Teutonic? The music is reasonably evocative...what should this be about? Let me know - if this goes nowhere fine, just thought I'd see what you guys say. Rock!

 

https://soundcloud.com/martinbfranci...hion-for-scott

[oldgitplayer]

I was able to get on your wavelength with previous contributions AETB and SMBKY, but I've never really been able to connect with this kind of electronic music.

You say Teutonic - well Kraftwerk Teutonic I can connect with, but this sounds bland and monotonous to me.

So if I was commissioned to write a lyric to this, I would go purposefully to the bland and mundane in social comment - make it work with obvious indifference.

 

Anyway - that's me with a totally subjective comment for what it's worth.

[stickboymusic]

Well it could go ANY way as it stands - here is something

 

Follow me

I've got the style you seek

Burberry

Dapper Dan and geek

 

You won't see

Me chasing fads or trends

I only lead

I won't do less than tens

 

I am the voice

Of fashion

A cut above the rest

High on love

High on action

 

I am the voice

Of fashion

A cut above the rest

High on love

High on passion

[LCK]

I like the track a lot. But lyrical ideas? I got nothin'.

 

Sorry.

[Oswlek]

Enjoyed but I have nothing to offer. If it were my song, I'd probably spend a week listening to Duran Duran to see if any of their lyric style came out.

[mbfrancis]

Haha, I don;t remember why I called it the Voice in Fashion (an obscure 80s band), it's just what came to me. Nice. I love the bold lines, and I might replace The Voice in Fashion with something else, hmmm. (What does "won't do less than 10s mean? Is this a Brit thing like being at 6s and 7s?)

 

But this inspired me in two directions:

 

Oh Coralee

Oh Coralee I tried

to make you see

to make you see but you were blind

 

or

 

Inspire me

Inspire me to climb

the dying tree

the dying tree of you and I

 

Hmmmm

[nat whilk II]

send me

to the dead ends of the world

send me

to the bottom of the whirl, the place

of pain

where the burned and blackened wings

musn't move

or it all starts up again

look down

where I fall without a crutch

reach out

so our fingers almost touch

and look deep

into the eyes that see your form

and then creep

into my arms so we can burn together

 

 

a happy little ditty like "Dont Worry, Be Happy" is what I have in mind heresmiley-happy

 

nat whilk

 

[mbfrancis]

send me

to the dead ends of the world

send me

to the bottom of the whirl, the place

of pain

where the burned and blackened wings

musn't move

or it all starts up again

look down

where I fall without a crutch

reach out

so our fingers almost touch

and look deep

into the eyes that see your form

and then creep

into my arms so we can burn together

 

 

a happy little ditty like "Dont Worry, Be Happy" is what I have in mind heresmiley-happy

 

nat whilk

That's awesome, feels a little like the Wasteland, ha (or is the Second Coming?). Anyway I got some great ideas, and the song has moved forward...I think it's going to be one of these Depeche Mode lyrics where black is white, good is bad, etc. So something like 'Inspire Me: but inspire me... to do horrible manipulative things to you. See that how I confounded expectations there!' If that makes sense.

 

Stay tuned, and thanks all!