Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 I wrote this as a joke over on the March Challenge? thread. It's March 15th after all. Could this be a rock song? It's supposed to be light and funny and certainly not ponderously pretentious. So no, I'm not going for Queensrych/Maiden/Dio territory. But it could be a tongue in cheek jangle pop sort of deal. ? Or not. Cause frankly, the subject matter is by nature tedious. Or not... Updating here as I go: You Too? It's such a marvelous morning!As I ride under the triumphal archIt's just another day, like any other any dayMeetings, more meetings, meet the day awayWhat rubbish, "Beware the ides of March!?! What's a king to do?Just what is a king to do?Everyone's got an opinionNow you Seer? You too?You too? You too? The day has come and nothingSeer, your prediction was wrong!I stand before you, sound body and mindThe soothsayer smiled and returned in kind"Aye Caesar, it's come but not gone!" What's an emperor to do?Just what is an emperor to do?Everyone's got an opinionNow you Seer? You too?You too? You too? Mark Antony's got my backHe'd protect me with his lifeSurely I'll be safe at the Senate sessionThough something's off with Casca's facial expressionShouting "Help Brothers!" while he buries the knife What's a dictator to do?Just what is a dictator to do?Each taking their turn with the daggerNow you Brutus? You too?You too? You too? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Sure, why not? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yeh - its totally cool Love this line And surely I'll be safe at the Senate sessionThough something seems odd with Casca's facial expression Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 Wow, I just got the melody in my head. I'd work up a youtube tonight but I'm in dental surgery in a couple hours. 2 words that should never go together. Dental... and surgery. Novocaine totally rocks my articulation. Of course, so does deep oil rig drillin in my mouth. Anyway... anyone have any suggestions on any clumsy bits or unclear story? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Wow, I just got the melody in my head. I'd work up a youtube tonight but I'm in dental surgery in a couple hours. 2 words that should never go together. Dental... and surgery. Novocaine totally rocks my articulation. Of course, so does deep oil rig drillin in my mouth. Anyway... anyone have any suggestions on any clumsy bits or unclear story? Yeah, there are none. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yeah, there are none. Till I try to sing it. I'm sure I'll be paring it down for maneuverability's sake. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Till I try to sing it. I'm sure I'll be paring it down for maneuverability's sake. Yeh on paper its fantastic - almost too good for me to make any suggestions depending on how words fit in the melody.... thats when i "may" have suggestions...if any Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 I wrote this as a joke over on the March Challenge? thread. It's March 15th after all. Could this be a rock song? It's supposed to be light and funny and certainly not ponderously pretentious. So no, I'm not going for Queensrych/Maiden/Dio territory. But it could be a tongue in cheek jangle pop sort of deal. ?Or not. Cause frankly, the subject matter is by nature tedious. Or not...You Too?It's such a marvelous morning!As he rode under the Roman archIt's just a day, like a day, like any dayOff to the square then the Theater of PompeyScoffing, "Beware the ides of March!?!?"What's a dictator to do?What's a dictator to do?Everyone's got an opinionNow you Seer? You too?You too? You too?The day has come and nothingSeer, your prediction was wrong!I stand before you, sound body and mindThe soothsayer smiled and returned in kind"Aye Caesar, come but not gone!"What's a dictator to do?What's a dictator to do?Everyone's got an opinionNow you Seer? You too?You too? You too?Mark Antony's got my backHe'd protect me with his lifeAnd surely I'll be safe at the Senate sessionThough something seems odd with Casca's facial expressionShouting "Help Brothers!" while burying the knifeWhat's a dictator to do?What's a dictator to do?Each taking their turn with the daggerNow you Brutus? Like Romulus before you...You too? You too? Too left field? By the way, whatever happened to Remus? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 Too left field? By the way, whatever happened to Remus? I'll tell ya... my grasp of the facts was a little (ok, a lot) shaky. So, I really just read the Wiki on Caesar and Ides of March and kept the cast to the key players. I don't want to assume anyone knows anything. Other than et tu Brutus? I've got to make that assumption for it to mean anything. So I am keeping to a small cast. Caesar - our protagonistSeer/Soothsayer - provider of the predictionCasca - drawing first blood and calling to armsMark Antony - Caesar's absent protectorBrutus - the unlikely (in Caesar's eyes) turncoat That's already too many, probably. Mark Antony could probably be dropped without it missing anything. Though I think it adds credence to Caesar's sense of security. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 I'll tell ya... my grasp of the facts was a little (ok, a lot) shaky. So, I really just read the Wiki on Caesar and Ides of March and kept the cast to the key players. I don't want to assume anyone knows anything. Other than et tu Brutus? I've got to make that assumption for it to mean anything. So I am keeping to a small cast. Caesar - our protagonist Seer/Soothsayer - provider of the prediction Casca - drawing first blood and calling to arms Mark Antony - Caesar's absent protector Brutus - the unlikely (in Caesar's eyes) turncoat That's already too many, probably. Mark Antony could probably be dropped without it missing anything. Though I think it adds credence to Caesar's sense of security. I had to look up every last one of them actually. But I once co-wrote a song called "Uncle Romulus... whatever happened to your brother Remus"... and thought I'd wow you with my deep understanding of Roman history. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yeh - its totally coolLove this lineAnd surely I'll be safe at the Senate sessionThough something seems odd with Casca's facial expression That last line seems to contain too many syllables. How about: Though Casca is showing an odd expression...? Or brutal expression? LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 That last line seems to contain too many syllables.How about:Though Casca is showing an odd expression...?Or brutal expression?LCK yeh..i have no idea how this fitting into song....looking forward to it though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 It looks like a project that could unfold in unexpected ways.Just check up on a couple of details : Was it known as the 'Roman Arch' or something else at the time?Pompei and Rome are in different geographical locations, so was there a Theatre of Pompei in Rome? Obviously Caesar wouldn't have referred to himself as a dictator, so I'll be interested to hear how you pull this off when singing the line to obtain comic effect.Methinks the noble Knightus be ambitious in his project. Beware the Ides of March! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Obviously Caesar wouldn't have referred to himself as a dictator Yes, that was the one thing I never felt entirely comfortable with. That is such a heavy word, and no one would ever use that to describe themselves. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yes, that was the one thing I never felt entirely comfortable with. That is such a heavy word, and no one would ever use that to describe themselves. Like this! [video=youtube;RpsAZYIHs7Q] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yep - I really like the subtlety in the handling of the word. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 Was it known as the 'Roman Arch' or something else at the time? Pompei and Rome are in different geographical locations, so was there a Theatre of Pompei in Rome? Obviously Caesar wouldn't have referred to himself as a dictator, so I'll be interested to hear how you pull this off when singing the line to obtain comic effect. Methinks the noble Knightus be ambitious in his project. Beware the Ides of March! Obviously Caesar wouldn't have referred to himself as a dictator... Julius Caesar was never a true emperor but in 49 B.C he declared himself as emperor or ''king'' of Rome - Wiki Other sources are quick to point out he was a dictator, plain and simple. That was new to me. ^^^ So I thought it kind of funny him calling himself a dictator. It's not a term I've ever associated with him but there it is. Of course he likes "king" or "emperor" better. But I crack up at the thought of him calling himself a dictator. Like this... Was it known as the 'Roman Arch' or something else at the time? Yeah but... I can't think of a more righteous rhyme for Ides of March. Kinda hard to let that one go. Pompei and Rome are in different geographical locations, so was there a Theatre of Pompei in Rome? Yeah, I completely hosed that one up. I read the Wiki quickly and wrote it out just as quick. So I was thinking the Theater was on Caesar's itinerary. It's where Marc Antony got held up by Senate forces to keep him at bay. So that gets rewritten. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 That last line seems to contain too many syllables.How about:Though Casca is showing an odd expression...?Or brutal expression?LCK ^ that's good. I do like "facial expression". It sounds funny. But my line is bumpy. I'll refine. It's funny that this was in response to a lack of a March Blockbuster. So I did my own Mar, 15 challenge, just babble it out looking for rhymes and facts with the Wiki open on one tab, a rhyming dictionary on another, and the March Challenge thread to write in. Just for a laugh and ended up digging it. I will definitely revisit it once I come down off these pain meds. Dentists are merciless bastards. Ouch. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 15, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 15, 2012 I think he's singing about his dick. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted March 15, 2012 Members Share Posted March 15, 2012 Yeah but... I can't think of a more righteous rhyme for Ides of March. Kinda hard to let that one go. Those structures were always built to commemorate a great victory and were known as a 'Triumphal Arch'. How about : 'Riding under the Triumphal Arch' or alluding to it : 'Riding triumphant under the arch' I know it's a bit pedantic, but the detail, the detail!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 16, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 16, 2012 That is great stuff. Roman arch puts you in the place and takes all the high brow out of it. But I really love Triumphal Arch. It's such a marvelous morning!As he rode under the triumphal archIt's just a day, like a day, like any dayMeetings, more meetings, meet the day awayScoffing, "Beware the ides of March!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 16, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 16, 2012 updating in post #1 as I go. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted March 16, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted March 16, 2012 That last line seems to contain too many syllables.How about:Though Casca is showing an odd expression...?Or brutal expression?LCK Though something's off with Casca's facial expression I think that fixes it. Good catch. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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