Members Irwin abrigo Posted June 6, 2013 Members Share Posted June 6, 2013 Written for a female singer. Need feedback It's my first time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 6, 2013 Members Share Posted June 6, 2013 It's a little creepy .... The prechorus (both versions) doesn't feel grammatically correct. "Many happy day" needs a verb and "Have so much to say" needs a pronoun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted June 6, 2013 Members Share Posted June 6, 2013 Lyrically, it isn't my cup of tea, with a lot of generic platitudes and cliches. This approach tends to need music to sell it, since you are travelling well-covered ground. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted June 11, 2013 Moderators Share Posted June 11, 2013 Well let's get that sucker down on tape shall we? :-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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