dissonance

I'd definitely re-edit the story because to me it sort of went off and meandered at the end. It was like you were writing this story with one purpose in mind and then you decided to change it to a wife homage. The end didn't really come together for me because the girl (your wife) was too far out of nowhere. She was never discussed previously. Plus I'd remove the unanswered questions that are placed in the story. It's pretty cruel to introduce them but never answer them or even touch on them again. Great stuff though.

Nice but where did this intern come from? How did she know you were home alone? Had there been any past interest? Maybe I missed something. Also the timing of the holidays seems very coincidental

Originally posted by MrKnobs She is! But she was a little insecure at 17. Terry D. P.S. She appears in this story. Err, how old were you at the time?

Originally posted by WonderMalcolm The Sandy/Candy bit has been posted before. Ok thanks then I'm not crazy. Regardless of whether these stories are true, they sure are well written.

I swear I've read that Sandy/Candy story before. Have you written about it before because I'm sure I've heard it. The part about Janis sounded a little familiar too but not enough to say I'm sure I've heard it before like the Sandy/Candy part.