Members thelonius74 Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 This is one I wrote a couple of months ago. I've got music to it, but haven't laid it down yet. The music and melody is a bit Beatles-esque. Lemmee know what you guys think. Jerry I could trip over the sofa and I could land with a crashAnd I could come in on cue when Shirley talks about trashBut you never seem to be so amused at the simple things.And I Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Lord Lucifer Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 hey man, I like those alot, very well written in my opinion. i think you get your point across very well too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bigpooface Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 not bad... i'd like to hear the music over it, it's hard to judge lyrics i reckon without the music. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members peer amid Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 easier to form a mental image than most, i like the writing style (i don't know what the tech names are) you are very descriptive in the minds eye.....keep at it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members devilboy Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 Nice job, they bring the listener in very comfortably. Reminds me of Elvis Costello. Lets get those tracks laid and share the music with us too! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ninja of love Posted June 10, 2002 Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 She's right about Jerry, you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members thelonius74 Posted June 10, 2002 Author Members Share Posted June 10, 2002 Originally posted by ninja of love She's right about Jerry, you know. *in whiny voice* I KNOW!!! What is the deal?? Jewish guy gets his own sitcom and I'm sleeping on the couch! I don't get it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rachigator Posted June 11, 2002 Members Share Posted June 11, 2002 Nice job! The lyrics are definitely fun! Almost satirical it seems... I'd LOVE to hear your music for it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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