Not Much of a Fighter

[rhino55]

Another piano song! Should it be "You can't hold somebody that want's to be held by somebody else" in the chorus or does "woman" work? Any input is of course also welcome.

 

Not Much of a Fighter

 

http://www.soundclick.com/player/sin...=13065706&q=hi

 

 

I'm not much of a fighter

Why does this have to be so intense

It's not who I am

It's what I'm up against

 

I'm more of a lover

But lately I'm not getting the chance

The good times are gone

And so is the romance

 

You can't fix somebody

They have to fix themselves

You can't hold a woman that wants to be held

by somebody else

 

I can be stubborn

I'm real good at holding on

To a hope that's

Long since gone

 

I want to be understanding

But the words don't make any sense

Coupled with these actions

Are where I take offense

 

You can't fix somebody

They have to fix themselves

You can't hold a woman that wants to be held

by somebody else

[LeonardScaper]

You can't fix somebody

They have to fix themselves

You can't hold a woman that wants to be held

by somebody else

 

Good stuff there....I like this tune a lot.

 

Perfect delivery as well.

[rhino55]

Thanks Lenny.

 

 

 

After listening back the first time the 5 chord shows up in the verse wasn't sitting right for me. Adding a D# in the bass makes it sit much better.

[oldgitplayer]

Likewise - I really like the tune. The lyric too.

 

[LCK]

Nice. It really works on the piano.

 

I have a couple of suggestions lyrically.

 

The chorus (which is really great, overall):

 

You can't fix somebody

when they can't fix themselves

You can't hold a woman that wants to be held

by somebody else

 

And this verse doesn't work for me. It's kind of filler, plus it's too, I don't know, cerebral? Not visceral.

 

The first two lines are good, but the second ones? Not so much.

 

I want to be understanding

But the words don't make any sense

Coupled with these actions

Are where I take offense

 

I would like to see you do something with the phrase "straddle the fence..." for the last line.

[rhino55]

Thanks fellas.

 

 

 

LCK, I think right about the last verse. Would this work?

 

 

 

I want to be understanding

 

But the words no longer make sense

 

theres two sides and I'm tired

 

of straddling this fence

[LCK]

Thanks fellas.

 

 

 

LCK, I think right about the last verse. Would this work?

 

 

 

I want to be understanding

 

But the words no longer make sense

 

theres two sides and I'm tired

 

of straddling this fence

 

 

Yeah, something like that.

[mbfrancis]

This is outstanding, great work.

Agree w/ LCK on "coupled" line, not sure of the fence solution.

I wish the start of the chorus had a slightly different melodic rhythm than the verses, maybe straight 8th notes. "and YOU can't FIX some-BOD-y"....a thought.