Members Starworm Posted February 14, 2015 Members Share Posted February 14, 2015 Hello. I've been looking around the site and finally decided to post. I've been working on some original tunes and would appreciate some feedback on them. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted February 14, 2015 Members Share Posted February 14, 2015 The link only takes me to Soundcloud homepage. Not to your songs. If you are looking for feedback then post one song at a time here + lyric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Starworm Posted February 14, 2015 Author Members Share Posted February 14, 2015 Sorry bout that. Let me see if this works. http://superstarwormhole.bandcamp.com/track/wanderlust Wanderlust- I carry the world on my shouldersMy back to the wallFor everyday I'm olderThe harder I fall Yeah wanderlustSometimes our dreams get broken and crushed I keep on searching for answers The world gets in the wayWhat's this life about?Oh my dying days Yeah wanderlustSometimes our dreams get broken and crushedYeah wanderlustIt's hard to know who you can trust Ascending through the cloudsThe summit finally appearsWhat am I doing here? Descending through the clouds The valley finally appearsWhat am I doing here? Life crush death Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rickidoo Posted February 15, 2015 Members Share Posted February 15, 2015 Me likes the music - and was pleasantly surprised when you reached the bridge. Quite a downshift! The rest of the music works fine... but the bridge was especially lovely to my ears. Probably would have dialed back the phase stuff on the vocals just a bit. But that's a stylistic choice. I get the idea of what the lyrics are saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members thehundredthone Posted February 15, 2015 Members Share Posted February 15, 2015 I like the song quite a bit. Love the synth vibe. I think it has the potential to have a lot more energy though. 1. The chorus could be stronger. Harmonies maybe, or a heavier guitar?2. The snare. Try a different sample, something tighter, and bring it forward a bit.3. I didn't get the "Life crush death" aspect of the lyrics.4. Agree with rickidoo on maybe dialing back the phaser. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Starworm Posted February 15, 2015 Author Members Share Posted February 15, 2015 Hey thanks for the ideas. I did get a bit trippy with some of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Patrick Roberge Posted February 16, 2015 Members Share Posted February 16, 2015 Nice bridge and nice voice too! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members AlamoJoe Posted February 16, 2015 Members Share Posted February 16, 2015 trippy stuff, nicely executed...Interesting lyric and vocal approach. But must confess...You had me at Paris, Texas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Starworm Posted February 19, 2015 Author Members Share Posted February 19, 2015 Thanks again for the compliments. Nice stuff from you guys as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mbfrancis Posted March 7, 2015 Members Share Posted March 7, 2015 Hey this is really cool. Love the overall vibe. Great breakdown at the bridge. The title word "wanderlust" needs/deserves a better, hookier melody. Maybe something less riffy/soulful, more poppy/sing-songy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Delmont Posted March 10, 2015 Members Share Posted March 10, 2015 It took me to a hip-hop tune. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Delmont Posted March 10, 2015 Members Share Posted March 10, 2015 You've got the sound. I think it's there. Totally marketable as is. Get out there with it! Delhttp://www.thefullertons.net Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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