Members leepmeister Posted January 15, 2003 Members Share Posted January 15, 2003 Here's something I wrote, and actually recorded with some friends. If we had a better singer it would help (I'm the bassist). Anyhow, tell me what you think of these lyrics. I tried to not make them too poppy: You didn't seem that special, you were just another friend.I never thought that I'd see what I saw in the end.I should have told you sooner the way you made me smile.Instead I took for granted that you'd be here for a while.(Chorus)If only I had knownWhat you meant to me.If only I had knownWhat I'd finally see (in you.) You left one winter morning when the earth was standing still.I watched the rain drops falling, on my rusted windowsill.It took me quite a long time to realize what I'd lost.The emptiness inside me, chilled like winter frost. (Chorus)If only I had knownWhat you meant to me.If only I had knownWhat I'd finally see.If Only I had known (x4) (Bridge) I would have brought you closer,Or maybe set you free.I would have let you choose and hoped you'd end up choosing me. (solo) You didn't seem that special, you were just another friend.I never thought that I'd see what I saw in the end.I should have told you sooner the way you made me smile.Instead I took for granted that you'd be there for a while. (Chorus)If only I had knownWhat you meant to me.If only I had knownWhat I'd finally see.If Only I had known (x4) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Stonebudd Posted January 15, 2003 Members Share Posted January 15, 2003 I like 'em! especially the middle verse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members guilded Posted January 15, 2003 Members Share Posted January 15, 2003 I like them very much. Definately keeper lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Kingnome Posted January 15, 2003 Members Share Posted January 15, 2003 I like them. Can I be picky ? Yes?....... Okay, about the second verse.... I'd change the first "winter" to "icy", "snowy", or perhaps "bitter". I think using the word "winter" twice is a bad idea when there's so many other potential adjectives. Otherwise, they're good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members AlwayzMisBhavin Posted January 15, 2003 Members Share Posted January 15, 2003 Originally posted by Kingnome I like them. Can I be picky ? Yes?....... Okay, about the second verse.... I'd change the first "winter" to "icy", "snowy", or perhaps "bitter". I think using the word "winter" twice is a bad idea when there's so many other potential adjectives. Otherwise, they're good. That was the suggestion I had too. Otherwise they look good. Good Luck. Alwayz MisBhavin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members GuitarDude Posted January 16, 2003 Members Share Posted January 16, 2003 Originally posted by Kingnome I like them. Can I be picky ? Yes?....... Okay, about the second verse.... I'd change the first "winter" to "icy", "snowy", or perhaps "bitter". I think using the word "winter" twice is a bad idea when there's so many other potential adjectives. Otherwise, they're good. I give my vote for bitter.. Otherwise.. I really like that song! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Charlie Posted January 16, 2003 Members Share Posted January 16, 2003 Bitter is always better Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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