Members LCK Posted December 12, 2014 Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 These all have finished tunes written for them. First up, an alt. country kind of song? "The Lies of Love" 1Your long list of failures is giving you the blues.You’re running out of options till there’s nothing left to lose.So you’ve holed up in some hotel room with a Minnesota blonde.And you tell yourself you’re happy, boy, but you just can’t get beyond Refrainthe lies of love, the lies of love,you’ll always be a prisoner ofthe second tries, the quick goodbyes, the lies of love. 2She was two when you were twenty and she’s less than twenty now.You know you must have met her somewhere, you just can’t remember how.She’s a perfect illustration of this curse afflicting youwith no easy explanation why you’re so addicted to(repeat refrain) BridgeAnd your tears fall like rain.And you can’t explainhow everything you are and want to be is born and dieswithin the secrecy and silence of her eyes. 3Though on the bedpost while she’s sleeping you might carve another notchshe’ll be missing in the morning with your wallet and your watch.You can’t face the shaving mirror so you hide behind a beard.And it couldn’t be much clearer, you’ve created what you feared.(repeat refrain) Words & Music © 1993 by Lee Charles KelleyWest Sixty Ninth Street Music (ASCAP) Next, an attempt at a kind of Jonathan Richman meets Buddy Holly meets B. J. Thomas, hooky pop tune... "Do You Really Want to Fall In Love With Him?" 1.Do you really want to fall in love with him,when you know he doesn’t care?He’s just another careless millionaire.It’s only money, girl.Do you really want to go out on a limbwith another superficial suit?His love is just a sugar substitute.I’m sweet as honey, girl. BridgeBut every time you look my way,your eyes seem to say,“Won’t you tell me, please, what’s wrong with me?”Nothing I can see. 2.Do you really want to spend those endless nights,crying all aloneby your portable telephone,when I could get a cab right over?Do you really want to fight those senseless fightswhen he’s got a heart of steel?Can’t you see the way I feel?I think I love you, girl. BridgeAnd every time I look your way,your eyes seem to say,“Won’t you tell me, please, what’s wrong with me?”Nothing I can see. BreakOh, if I had the nerveyou’d have the love that you deserve.I’d give it to you.Now, darling, do youunderstand what I’ve been trying to say?Give it up now! ChorusGive it up now, give it up, baby,he’s never gonna make you happy.(repeat and fade) Words & Music © 1991 by Lee Charles KelleyWest Sixty Ninth Street Music (ASCAP) And a very old country tune (from 1974?) "I’m Free (Approximately)" 1.Woke up this morning. I put on my socks,grabbed a bag of Doritos, pulled a Pepsi from the ice-box.Breakfast as usual, yeah it’s the same ol’ tune—how lovely is a Monday morning on a Monday afternoon. 2.Coulda stayed at home today but I went out of doors.I walked downtown, looked in all the stores.Bought myself a record and a brand new comb.Then my feet got tired so I went home. Chorus’Cause I’m free. That’s me without you.I do what I choose, babe, I don’t choose what I do.Yes, I’m free: no schedule or plan.I don’t need a woman, I’m a liberated man. 3.Put on my record, played it over again.Me and Merle Haggard till half past ten.I sat in the dark and thought of things that we said,then took off my socks and went to bed. Chorus’Cause I’m free. That’s me without you.I do what I choose, babe, I don’t choose what I do.Yes, I’m free: no schedule or plan.I don’t need a woman, I’m a liberated man. I don’t need a woman, I’m a liberated man. Words & Music © 1974 by Lee Charles KelleyWest Sixty Ninth Street Music (ASCAP) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted December 12, 2014 Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 This line is KILLER how lovely is a Monday morning on a Monday afternoon. Id have that tag each verse. Love it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted December 12, 2014 Moderators Share Posted December 12, 2014 That is a great line. And using it as a reoccurring tag is a good idea. V2Coulda stayed at home today but I went out of doors.I walked downtown, looked in all the stores.Bought myself a record and some brand new shoeshow lovely is a Monday morning on a Monday afternoon. V3Put on my record, played it over again.Me and Merle Haggard till I don't know whenI sat listening to him sing his saddest tunehow lovely is a Monday morning on a Monday afternoon. That would be cool with a chorus too. Refrain and chorus. ? Anyway Lee, I read these late last night and could a melody in my head for all of them. Great stuff. Nice natural cadence and feel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DonnaMarilyn Posted December 12, 2014 Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 Excellent storytelling, with compelling imagery and an easy, natural flow. I especially enjoyed 'I'm Free (Approximately)'. Good suggestions from Lee Knight. Donna Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tbry Posted December 12, 2014 Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 I agree with that Monday Morning Monday afternoon line...wish I had thought of it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted December 12, 2014 Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 I agree that the Monday morning / Monday afternoon line is a goodun, but IMO 'The Lies of Love' stands out as the strongest song of the three. It is a piece of astute personal / social observation and very well crafted. It has the strongest writing of the three.If I was your producer, I'd be saying that it should go on your record. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted December 12, 2014 Author Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 I agree that the Monday morning / Monday afternoon line is a goodun, but IMO 'The Lies of Love' stands out as the strongest song of the three. It is a piece of astute personal / social observation and very well crafted. It has the strongest writing of the three. Cool. Thanks! I'll try to record all three and post them in the monthly what-dya-callit thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted December 12, 2014 Author Members Share Posted December 12, 2014 Cool. Thanks! I'll try to record all three and post them in the monthly what-dya-callit thread. The Monthly showcase thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mbfrancis Posted December 15, 2014 Members Share Posted December 15, 2014 I like Lies of Love a lot - only off things for me are "Minnesota blonde" (so what, Minnesota doesn't tell us anything) and how she robs him at the end. Not a fan of these multi-song posts, it's hard enough keeping track of single song threads. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted December 15, 2014 Author Members Share Posted December 15, 2014 I like Lies of Love a lot - only off things for me are "Minnesota blonde" (so what, Minnesota doesn't tell us anything) and how she robs him at the end. Not a fan of these multi-song posts, it's hard enough keeping track of single song threads. Good point. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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