Members Foose31 Posted August 19, 2014 Members Share Posted August 19, 2014 Final Edit 8-21-14 I just can't stop tweaking it.. LOL Life's Road Traveled 8-21-14 (V)You’re rollin’ down life’s highwayPassing signs, that go unreadBarricades are your final warningFlashin' light says, “Detour Ahead” (V2)Cool moon lit sky, rough countryComin' up, to a fork in the roadChoices are between pavement or gravel?What lies ahead, you don't really know (chorus)Even the paths of least resistanceAre full of steep grades and steady declinesThat's just the way life's road travelsKeep followin' the signs and you'll be fine (3)You see the lights out in the distanceThat's where you wanna be, not so far awayIf you choose not to take the blacktopThat unpaved road will lead you astray (chorus)Even the paths of least resistanceAre full of steep grades and steady declinesThat's just the way life's road travelsKeep followin' the signs and you'll be fine (bridge)Outta gear and grinding the clutchPlus drivin' blind won't help you much (chorus)Even the paths of least resistanceAre full of steep grades and steady declinesThat's just the way life's road travelsKeep followin' the signs and you'll be fineRemember follow the signs and you'll be fine ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Been playing around with another lyric. Edit: 8-20-14 The Road Life Travels (V)You’re rollin’ down life’s highwayIgnored signs, passed by unreadBarricades and a final warningFlashing light says, “Detour Ahead” (V2)Dim moon lit sky, rough countryHeadin’ south, fuels gettin' lowFork in the road, pavement or gravelWhat lies ahead, your choice will know (chorus)That’s the road your life travelsYou're in control or you're drivin' blindYou can choose the path of least resistanceJust stay on the road the whole timeThat’s the road your life travels (V3)You see those bright lights in the distanceSo close to touch, yet so far awayWill it be, blacktop or gravel?Wrong choice leads you astray (chorus)That’s the road your life travelsYou're in control or you're drivin' blindYou can choose the path of least resistanceJust stay on the road the whole timeThat’s the road your life travels (bridge)If wrong turns leave you feeling lost or strandedKeep it in gear, stay off the clutchDon't take your life for granted (chorus)That’s the road your life travelsYou're in control or you're drivin' blindYou can choose the path of least resistanceJust stay on the road the whole timeThat’s the road your life travelsYeah that's the road your life travels __________________________________________________ ___ Travelin’ Life’s Road (V)You’re rollin’ down life’s highwayFlyin’ by road signs that go unreadAround a curve, final warningFlashing lights sayin’, “Detour Ahead” (V2)Dim moon lit road, through rough countryHeadin’ south and takin’ it slowPavement ends, turns into gravelWhat lies ahead, Only your choices know (chorus)That’s the way life’s road travelsIt’s a steep grade with some steady declinesWe search for a path of least resistanceBut follow the road that life has in mind (V3)You see those bright lights in the distanceBut they keep getting further awayWith every exit you take to reach themBecomes a dead end to your day (chorus)That’s the way life’s road travelsIt’s a steep grade with some steady declinesWe search for a path of least resistanceBut follow the road that life has in mind (bridge)While headin’ for your destinationIf you start to feel stranded and lostGet your mind into gear and pop that clutchDon't give up your journey at any cost (chorus)That’s the way life’s road travelsIt’s a steep grade or a steady declineYou'll find the path of least resistanceSo follow the roadYeah keep followin' lifes roadFollow the road life has in mind Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 19, 2014 Moderators Share Posted August 19, 2014 Nicely done!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 19, 2014 Members Share Posted August 19, 2014 Nicely done!! +1, though I'm not sure about "that's the way life's road travels..." I generally get itchy and restless whenever I hear "life" mentioned in a song lyric (depending on how it's used of course). Of course I do like "Give Me the Simple Life." [video=youtube;zP-73pinHbE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Foose31 Posted August 20, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 20, 2014 +1, though I'm not sure about "that's the way life's road travels..." I generally get itchy and restless whenever I hear "life" mentioned in a song lyric (depending on how it's used of course). Hmmm. Does it read better, "That's the road your life travels"? I edited the original. Flows better when I'm actually able to sing it out loud. (Unable to at work) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Foose31 Posted August 20, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 20, 2014 Thank you Lee! I picture Restless Heart singing this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 20, 2014 Members Share Posted August 20, 2014 I like a road song and this appears to be a good one. I do think you have a thematic inconsistency though. In V1 it says "detour ahead" which implies the driver isn't in control of their destination. This is consistent with the chorus, "follow the road life has in mind." In V2 it says "your choice will know." This implies the driver is in control of where they're going. I suppose the argument could be made the choice is in whether or not to follow the detour sign, but for this type of thing I think it would be more effective to keep it more black and white. A rewrite for me would look something like this. Travelin’ Life’s Road (V)You’re rollin’ down the highwayFlyin’ by road signs that go unreadAround a curve, final warningFlashing lights, “Road Closed Ahead” (V2)Dim moon lit road, through rough countryHeadin’ south and takin’ it slowPavement ends, turns into gravelWhat lies ahead, you can't really know (chorus)That’s life living on the roadIt’s a steep grade with some steady declinesWe search for a path of least resistanceand follow the orange detour signs (V3)You see those bright lights in the distanceBut they keep getting further awayWith every exit you take to reach themBecomes a dead end to your day (chorus)That’s life living on the roadIt’s a steep grade with some steady declinesWe search for a path of least resistanceBut follow the road that life has in mind (bridge)While headin’ for your destinationIf you start to feel stranded and lostGet your mind into gear and pop that clutchDon't give up your journey at any cost (chorus)That’s life living on the roadIt’s a steep grade or a steady declineYou'll find the path of least resistanceSo follow the road the orange detour signsYeah keep followin' roadFollow the road life has in mind Hope this helps Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Foose31 Posted August 20, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 20, 2014 I like a road song and this appears to be a good one. I do think you have a thematic inconsistency though. In V1 it says "detour ahead" which implies the driver isn't in control of their destination. This is consistent with the chorus, "follow the road life has in mind." In V2 it says "your choice will know." This implies the driver is in control of where they're going. I suppose the argument could be made the choice is in whether or not to follow the detour sign, but for this type of thing I think it would be more effective to keep it more black and white. A rewrite for me would look something like this. Travelin’ Life’s Road (V) You’re rollin’ down the highway Flyin’ by road signs that go unread Around a curve, final warning Flashing lights, “Road Closed Ahead” (V2) Dim moon lit road, through rough country Headin’ south and takin’ it slow Pavement ends, turns into gravel What lies ahead, you can't really know (chorus) That’s life living on the road It’s a steep grade with some steady declines We search for a path of least resistance and follow the orange detour signs (V3) You see those bright lights in the distance But they keep getting further away With every exit you take to reach them Becomes a dead end to your day (chorus) That’s life living on the road It’s a steep grade with some steady declines We search for a path of least resistance But follow the road that life has in mind (bridge) While headin’ for your destination If you start to feel stranded and lost Get your mind into gear and pop that clutch Don't give up your journey at any cost (chorus) That’s life living on the road It’s a steep grade or a steady decline You'll find the path of least resistance So follow the road the orange detour signs Yeah keep followin' road Follow the road life has in mind Hope this helps I do like your changes to the old lyric...the new edited lyric though explains better and fixes the inconsistency you found. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Foose31 Posted August 21, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 21, 2014 Added , I believe to be, my final edit in OP...LOL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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