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    So some times you're looking at a sheet of words and it just doesn't fit into a traditional song. So why not go real artsy with it?

    I am really happy with the result. Diversify myself.

    Anyone listen to Joseph Arthur? He was the vibe I was feeling on this, don't know why.

    Questions?:lol:
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    Yeah, I liked that a lot. And I love the repeating structure of the Where am I going, if I'm going at all? Am I building something worth building, if I'm building something at all? Etc. Very cool.

    And your video work is awesome. I love the roses in the side mirror. I love seeing Chicago, I miss it. The clouds drifting left and a low opacity something else drifting right. Lots of work in that video alone.
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    • #3
      Is that all original video footage?
      Don't listen to Justin.
      LCK - 2/21/2012

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      • #4
        Yeah, I liked that a lot. And I love the repeating structure of the Where am I going, if I'm going at all? Am I building something worth building, if I'm building something at all? Etc. Very cool.

        And your video work is awesome. I love the roses in the side mirror. I love seeing Chicago, I miss it. The clouds drifting left and a low opacity something else drifting right. Lots of work in that video alone.


        Thank you Lee. That lyric was the first one that I wrote. "Where am I going" Is what I kept repeating to myself for the better part of the last three months. It has a lot of meaning to it in a figurative sense.

        The video was a labor of love. Started very simple as far as layout and content, but found that it didn't match the video in my head that i wanted to make. so i kept working it, much like a song, until i was really happy with it delivering my message. Chicago is a perfect backdrop for any video too
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        • #5
          Hi, Jack!

          I'm the HC Songwriting Forum mod. This forum runs a little differently than many others, so we've set up a Welcome / Guidelines / Resources sticky thread (the important stuff is all in the first post). Don't worry if (what I believe is) your first post bent any rules (not saying it did, mind you). It's pretty much par for the course. I think that first post in the Welcome thread explains why we do have some rules pretty well, but if you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask via PM or a post. :thu:


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          The chorus seems a little weak... I think it needs more lasers.

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          • #6
            I like the video and I think the song works in this "spoken word" format.
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            -Coco Chanel

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            • #7
              I liked the vid, Jack. (Tim?) The juxtaposition of the gentle, fingerpicked background and the super-reserved vocal delivery against the jacked up hyperspeed vid is really interesting and provocative.

              I've done at least a couple of similar things, myself. Here's one.*



              That scary, primal sax work is by the redoubtable Jeff Turmes, songwriter, singer, guitarist, stand up bassman, and reedman.


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              The chorus seems a little weak... I think it needs more lasers.

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                Very cool. Reminded me of Raymond Carver's "So Much Water, So Close to Home".
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                Before you leave the house, look in the mirror and take one thing off.

                -Coco Chanel

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                • #9
                  Is that all original video footage?


                  Yeah this is all original footage I shot. the beauty of a DSLR
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                  • #10
                    Very cool. Reminded me of Raymond Carver's "So Much Water, So Close to Home".

                    I may have read that. For a while in the 80s I read a lot of Carver. In fact, that makes a lot of sense. I had been thinking that maybe the image had come to me back channel by people talking about the movie, "Stand by Me," which I believe has a scene where some boys find a body. But Carver makes more sense, as I read a lot of him really fast and his backed off style sort of informed some of my later prose writing, I think. That connection makes a lot more sense.


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                    The chorus seems a little weak... I think it needs more lasers.

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                    • #11
                      Hi, Jack!

                      I'm the HC Songwriting Forum mod. This forum runs a little differently than many others, so we've set up a Welcome / Guidelines / Resources sticky thread (the important stuff is all in the first post). Don't worry if (what I believe is) your first post bent any rules (not saying it did, mind you). It's pretty much par for the course. I think that first post in the Welcome thread explains why we do have some rules pretty well, but if you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask via PM or a post. :thu:


                      sounds good, I like it in this neighborhood...
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                      • #12
                        I may have read that. For a while in the 80s I read a lot of Carver. In fact, that makes a lot of sense. I had been thinking that maybe the image had come to me back channel by people talking about the movie, "Stand by Me," which I believe has a scene where some boys find a body. But Carver makes more sense, as I read a lot of him really fast and his backed off style sort of informed some of my later prose writing, I think. That connection makes a lot more sense.


                        Yeah, there is a similar scene in "Stand By Me" which also came to mind. :thu:
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                        Before you leave the house, look in the mirror and take one thing off.

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                        • #13
                          I usually don't like this sorta stuff. But something about yours really drew me in. Great work.

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                          • #14
                            sounds good, I like it in this neighborhood...

                            Cool, we're glad to have you with us!


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                            The chorus seems a little weak... I think it needs more lasers.

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                            • #15
                              I like the video and I think the song works in this "spoken word" format.


                              Thanks, I agree. It was a departure for me, but I had to say yes and follow the direction my head was going. I'm glad I did, it took me someplace where I wasn't expecting I was going to go and loved every minute of it.
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