Members stickboymusic Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Hello It's been a while and Illinois Jack posted some lyrics that seem to have perked the interest of a few people here. I thought I'd make it an official challenge. Lyrics. (i'm sure he doesn't mind if you alter slightly to fit.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IllinoisJack Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Some VERY strong contenders here. This is more fun than I'm allowed. I have to go hit myself with a hammer now. brb. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Cool idea, Stick. Are you going to participate? LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members shortchord Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Awesome idea. I had to make sure to write my song before listening to any of the others, but here it is: http://soundcloud.com/shortchord/theres-that-moon-again Some VERY strong contenders here. This is more fun than I'm allowed. I have to go hit myself with a hammer now. brb. I have to say: you write lyrics that are easy to put a tune to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members blue2blue Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Oh, man, if Stick's 'competing,' I'm not gonna stick around and get beat up further. LCK already delivered a really nice improvement on my now humbled effort. Seriously, cool Challenge! I'm listening to shortchord's version. A little more on the gentle folkie side. Nice. It's fun seeing what you came up with separately. LCK had built on a couple elements in my version, but made some very nice improvements. Interesting to see a pretty different musical take on the lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 shortchord's version. Nice. Agreed. LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members RickDieffenbach Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 I had a lot of fun playing with this. This was done very quickly. And, ah... I may have ripped some songs off. Not purposely, just did this quickly. Jack - just wanted to say - I absolutely loved your lyrics. Superb. Redwing Blackbird Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 4, 2012 Members Share Posted August 4, 2012 Hey Rick, I love what you did with the chorus. Really cool idea. LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 4, 2012 Moderators Share Posted August 4, 2012 WHAT A FUN IDEA!!! OK, my verse is definitely ripped from something, but it might fly if I were to consciously rework the melody around that same rhythm. The chorus is kinda interesting though. Maybe. I added a line doe-c-doe for temp filler, it felt like it wanted a group of 3 there for my treatment. Anyway... you've guys have been busy! So here's my rush job. 15 minutes after reading the lyric and challenge. Man, you guys are quick! [video=youtube;JYtOkQ8n5dA] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 4, 2012 Moderators Share Posted August 4, 2012 I didn't listen to any before I did mine. Boy, everybody's is really good. It's funny how similar they are, all of ours, in some respects. Very cool idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 WHAT A FUN IDEA!!! OK, my verse is definitely ripped from something, but it might fly if I were to consciously rework the melody around that same rhythm. The chorus is kinda interesting though. Maybe. I added a line doe-c-doe for temp filler, it felt like it wanted a group of 3 there for my treatment. Fabulous. You knocked it out of the park! Man, I need to take guitar lessons... LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IllinoisJack Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 So many creative people here. So many great musical ideas. I don't want to single anyone out for fear of slighting someone - suffice it to say - this is one of the greatest experiences I've had (musically). You guys blow me away. Great ideas, things I NEVER would have thought of. Thank you all. I am humbled. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 Lee Knight wins on stage patter. Rick D. wins for full-on arrangement. shortchord sounded least like I thought he would. chris c has the mellowest version. I still like Blue2Blue and LCK's versions. It's interesting to hear all these different approaches to the same lyric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members shortchord Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 I threw a couple of arrangement ideas on my track: http://soundcloud.com/shortchord/theres-that-moon-again-1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 I threw a couple of arrangement ideas on my track:http://soundcloud.com/shortchord/theres-that-moon-again-1 I really like it. Once again, I feel the need to take guitar lessons... LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 I threw a couple of arrangement ideas on my track:http://soundcloud.com/shortchord/theres-that-moon-again-1 Sweet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 I really like it. Once again, I feel the need to take guitar lessons... LCK Ironically, today I signed up to start taking guitar lessons again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members RickDieffenbach Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 When I woke up this morning, I played all of the songs, including mine. Mine - I absolutely cringed when i heard it. The vocals were so pitchy. Geez. I think I have fixed that now. I also rebalanced, added some accents, and added some sfx. Blue - Liken it. Almost early James Taylor. I think it could have been slightly slower for more emotional appeal. Nice. SA - I really love the chorus. The verse melody is pretty good too. LCK - superb. You ooze talent. And that chorus. Absolutely perfect. Lordy. Chris - What a beautiful lulible like song. Of all the songs I've heard so far in this set, I could easily hear your version in some movie. Short - Nice country tune. Love the guitar. I was particularly intriqued with the chorus. And the arrangement really builds nicely. Well done. Lee - The second in this set with a flavor of James Taylor. Of all the songs, yours seems to me to be the most sing-along-able. I could also see your version, with some slight changes to the lyrics, becoming a childrens song. BRAVO to all. Also a thanks to Stick for posting this songwriting-muscle-building challenge. Rick Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members blue2blue Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 A FORMAL NOTE FROM THE MODERATOR: Before Jack makes any final decisions regarding his 'musical suitors,' I thought it was important to note that the forum rules have been modified to make a formal distinction between soliciting critique/feedback in a critique thread and those seeking a full collaboration. Here is the newly amended rule in question: Suggestions become property of the songwriter where applicable Suggestions or contributions made to a song or composition in a critique thread should be considered a gift to the songwriter/composer and automatically become his or her intellectual property. Those seeking collaboration opportunities should consider the work of others as belonging to its creators until a formal private arrangement is made. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted August 5, 2012 Author Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 Suggestions or contributions made to a song or composition in a critique thread should be considered a gift to the songwriter/composer and automatically become his or her intellectual property. Those seeking collaboration opportunities should consider the work of others as belonging to its creators until a formal private arrangement is made. You will hear from my lawyers soon!! I like it... it's getting heavy in here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members blue2blue Posted August 5, 2012 Members Share Posted August 5, 2012 There was a lot of weight on that 'where applicable' phrase before. A helpful party suggested it might be better to add some language explicitly separating critique/feedback thread suggestions from the 'collaboration opportunity' threads or other collaborative arrangements that might arise and making it clear that, until collaborators reach a formal arrangement between themselves, their contributions remain their own, discrete intellectual property. As suggested elsewhere, it's best to have a clear, formal understanding of everyone's rights and responsibilities in a collaborative situation. What might seem fussy or over-cautious in the beginning might prove prudent and save a lot of grief later on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IllinoisJack Posted August 6, 2012 Members Share Posted August 6, 2012 Sorry, but unless it's somehow "required" or "Implicitly expected" I would really rather not name a single person as a "winner". We all win because we all learn along the way. Thank you all for the great feedback/suggestions/comments and - most importantly - music. Perhaps I will contact someone privately, perhaps I won't. But unless it's some breech of etiquite, I declare it all a tie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 6, 2012 Members Share Posted August 6, 2012 Sorry, but unless it's somehow "required" or "Implicitly expected" I would really rather not name a single person as a "winner". We all win because we all learn along the way. Thank you all for the great feedback/suggestions/comments and - most importantly - music. Perhaps I will contact someone privately, perhaps I won't. But unless it's some breech of etiquite, I declare it all a tie. It's OK Jack - because as you say - we are all winners.The idea of the monthly challenge is for us to challenge ourselves and maybe move out of the comfort zone that we usually write in. It's not a Collaboration Thread. The WIP threads and the Collaboration threads are different from the Monthly Challenge. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted August 6, 2012 Members Share Posted August 6, 2012 Hope it's not too late... Here's my first pass: http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11811523 Edit: I only listened to one (Shortchord's) prior to posting this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members RickDieffenbach Posted August 6, 2012 Members Share Posted August 6, 2012 Bee3 - absolutely beautiful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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