Harmony Central Forums
Announcement Announcement Module
Collapse
No announcement yet.

Down the Towpath - new WIP

Page Title Module
Move Remove Collapse







X
Conversation Detail Module
Collapse
  • Filter
  • Time
  • Show
Clear All
new posts

  • Down the Towpath - new WIP

    This is something I'm currently putting together.
    Rick invited me to run some of my stuff past him, and he thinks I'm musically ready, and should start posting my material for input. So here goes :

    1st question - Do you think this piece of music sounds right for the lyric? If so, then I'll start getting a vocal melody ready to post.
    2nd - Please comment on the lyric.
    3rd - Don't comment on the playing and recording. This is just rough stuff on a Zoom H1 and patched together in Garageband. Anyway, I won't really know what you're talking about.

    I'm going to need a lot of help on the music front.


    Down the towpath
    Burton (2011)
    'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
    CHARLIE PARKER

  • #2
    Work those winsome major sevenths!

    (but it's hard to follow the lyric sheet without something to guide me for the melody line and meter)
    Lyrics Songs Demos Videos Covers Facebook Tumblr

    Before you leave the house, look in the mirror and take one thing off.

    -Coco Chanel

    Comment


    • #3
      Work those winsome major sevenths!

      (but it's hard to follow the lyric sheet without something to guide me for the melody line and meter)


      Yep - but I've got to take one step at a time.
      What do you hear in the music? Do you feel a languid sunny day where everything is easy?
      'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
      CHARLIE PARKER

      Comment


      • #4
        Yep - but I've got to take one step at a time.
        What do you hear in the music? Do you feel a languid sunny day where everything is easy?


        Not only that, I feel like this is a Rick-influenced tune!

        Very nice, both the background track and the lyric.

        I guess spring must be coming to Aussie-land!

        LCK
        "I write from a different place. I do not even know what it is called, or if it has a name. It just comes and I sculpt it. But it is also a lot of hard work." —Van Morrison

        Comment


        • #5
          Lovely, even makes me think happy thoughts.

          The only thing I could say for certain is that I hope the vocals enter at 0:22. I love it when verses make a surprise entrance and this is a great set up for one. To make it really notable, you'd probably want to just strum that chord once when the vox arrives and then wait until 0:24 or 0:25 for the next to come in.

          Anything else will need to hear a melody to pick apart.
          Don't listen to Justin.
          LCK - 2/21/2012

          Comment


          • #6
            Lovely, even makes me think happy thoughts.

            The only thing I could say for certain is that I hope the vocals enter at 0:22. I love it when verses make a surprise entrance and this is a great set up for one. To make it really notable, you'd probably want to just strum that chord once when the vox arrives and then wait until 0:24 or 0:25 for the next to come in.

            Anything else will need to hear a melody to pick apart.


            I'm glad it feels happy - I'm thinking a Lovin' Spoonful 'Daydream' vibe.

            Interesting that you mention the chord strum. I've done a track with a single downstroke chord on the 1 of every 4. I just didn't do it for this mix.
            It was in my 1st mix at 100 bpm which was dragging its heels a bit.
            'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
            CHARLIE PARKER

            Comment


            • #7
              Well I love it.

              I actually found myself singing the third verse when it came around.

              Definitely has a 'Spoonful' vibe to it. Thanks for getting this out here. Don't stop now.

              Oh, and btw........

              <<<<<<< 1975
              Leonard Scaper

              Comment


              • #8
                Well I love it.

                I actually found myself singing the third verse when it came around.

                Definitely has a 'Spoonful' vibe to it. Thanks for getting this out here. Don't stop now.

                Oh, and btw........

                <<<<<<< 1975


                As long as I can get beyond the meh vocal melody barrier, there's no reason to stop.

                Glad you love it, and glad it made you sing - I think your response answers my initial question on whether the music and lyric feel connected.

                Aah.......1975 - the years of being a twentysomething....
                'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
                CHARLIE PARKER

                Comment


                • #9
                  As long as I can get beyond the meh vocal melody barrier, there's no reason to stop.


                  Listen, my friend, to everything else that gets posted. Singing is a bit like playing golf in that there is always somebody out there who is worse than you.

                  That tenet has sustained me for all these years.
                  Leonard Scaper

                  Comment


                  • #10
                    Listen, my friend, to everything else that gets posted. Singing is a bit like playing golf in that there is always somebody out there who is worse than you.

                    That tenet has sustained me for all these years.


                    I'm now fully prepared to punish your musical sensibilities with my 'songwriter's voice', but I have to compose a melody first, don't I?
                    And that my friend, is as rare as the proverbial rocking-horse droppings.
                    'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
                    CHARLIE PARKER

                    Comment


                    • #11
                      I have to compose a melody first, don't I?


                      Actually....no, you don't.

                      The first thing you have to do is just sing.

                      Sing first....see what feels right. Then compose. This coming from a guy who has never once 'composed' a melody.
                      Leonard Scaper

                      Comment


                      • #12
                        Actually....no, you don't.

                        The first thing you have to do is just sing.

                        Sing first....see what feels right. Then compose. This coming from a guy who has never once 'composed' a melody.


                        I do exactly that - but don't end up with anything shower hummable.
                        So I start harmonising it to add interest.
                        But the primary melody remains tres ordinaire.

                        Which is probably why I go to town with unusual combinations of backing chords - because they invoke a melody that it is not naturally in me.
                        You'll see what I mean as I start posting stuff.

                        I know I'm going to get comments about crafting melody - but I've read books on it, and it still doesn't happen.
                        And if anyone tells me to learn my scales, I'll commit a homicybercrime...........
                        'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
                        CHARLIE PARKER

                        Comment


                        • #13
                          And if anyone tells me to learn my scales, I'll commit a homicybercrime...........


                          You guys use scales?
                          Leonard Scaper

                          Comment


                          • #14
                            The music has a very happy sound. Even without a vocal, it put me right there with you along that canal.

                            I'll have to wait to hear music and vocal together to really get a feel for what works and what doesn't, but here are a couple of preliminary observations:

                            --I noticed that the first verse has an AAAA rhyme scheme, while the rest of the verses, as well as the chorus, have an AABB scheme. That's not necessarily a problem, just something I noticed.

                            --In the second verse, you rhymed "canal" with "well." I'm not sure what the Aussie pronunciation of those words sounds like, so maybe that would work? I once knew a guy in eastern N.C. who could have easily rhymed those words, but I think it's going to sound strange to most Americans.

                            Regarding your build up to posting, I'm getting the feeling that you might be a bit of a perfectionist. As Lenny said, there is always someone out there who is worse than you. Well, that's why I'm here - so the real musicians won't feel bad about posting their slightly imperfect tracks.
                            Beware of deepities.<br>-- Daniel Dennett

                            Comment


                            • #15
                              Oh yeah... this is going to be really nice. I love the feel... although I think the drums need to be a bit less out-front (the bass drum particularly). The shaker is great though!

                              This absolutely has the feel-good, spring is here kind of vibe.

                              I admire your ability to come up with these detailed and descriptive lyrics. I have issue with only one line...

                              The air is sweet and life's so neat

                              Comment

                              Working...
                              X