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Three Phone Calls

 

Hey

Hey

How are you doing today

I'm ok

Still feeling some pain

Did you ring for the nurses?

Oh yes, they came right away.

But no one will tell me how long I must stay?

They're still running tests

Try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok

 

Hey

Hey

Did you get to the hospital today?

I did. I saw the doctor.

What did he say?

He wants to run some more tests.

Then the nurse came

So I couldn't stay.

That's ok, it what they need to do

Try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok

 

Hey

Hey

Do you think you can get down on Saturday?

I can't do it from here, there's no freaking way

But I'm planning to drive over Columbus Day.

I don't understand why they have to keep running these tests

Yeah I know, I should go try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok

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Three Phone Calls


Hey

Hey

How are you doing today

I'm ok

Still feeling some pain

Did you ring for the nurses?

Oh yes, they came right away.

But no one will tell me how long I must stay?

They're still running tests

Try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok


Hey

Hey

Did you get to the hospital today?

I did. I saw the doctor.

What did he say?

He wants to run some more tests.

Then the nurse came

So I couldn't stay.

That's ok, it what they need to do

Try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok


Hey

Hey

Do you think you can get down on Saturday?

I can't do it from here, there's no freaking way

But I'm planning to drive over Columbus Day.

I don't understand why they have to keep running these tests

Yeah I know, I should go try and get some rest

I'll call you tomorrow, ok?

Ok

 

 

Brilliant, as usual.

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There's a lot of potential understated hook material in the lyric, but I could see this with a rich backing track full of memorable little squiggles, too. This has the potential to be one of those amazing tracks that people listen to ten times before they start to piece together the lyric, at which point they fall in love with the song.

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There's a lot of potential understated hook material in the lyric, but I could see this with a rich backing track full of memorable little squiggles, too. This has the potential to be one of those amazing tracks that people listen to ten times before they start to piece together the lyric, at which point they fall in love with the song.

 

 

10 listens is a pretty high bar. I usually aim for two but a fraction approaching one is more realistic.

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10 listens is a pretty high bar. I usually aim for two but a fraction approaching one is more realistic.

 

 

Gotta think in long-tail terms. Put it in the GJ Songwriting contest, and SOMEONE will put it in their iTunes, then it will end up on their phone, and eventually they'll shuffle through it often enough for the lyrics to sink in.

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