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    The writing of this song has undergone many changes to get to this point. I can't be too worried with the recording.....getting better seems to take a lot of time. I've never thrown it out to any of you here at Harmony....and, as always, get feed back here that I just don't get anywhere else! Thanks in advance for any and all comments. -Tom



    "Not That Kind Of Man"

    by Tom Tognaci



    http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10850743



    I

    I heard my little girl crying late last night

    And I would be lying if I said I thought her boyfriend was Mr. Right

    I thought to tell her,

  • #2
    Mm, a fellow resident of the pacific ocean. Aloha and such.

    My 20cts:



    Lyrically -

    First Impression of Verse I: Aww...

    First Impression of Verse II: "Baby" made me think significant other.. which made me think the second verse was going to be introspective.

    It took till the end of the verse before I realized I was confused and that it wasn't a shift in subject.



    Second impression of Verse I: Aww..

    Second impression of Verse II: Aww..



    Performance and Arrangement-wise it sounds good to me.



    Recording quality-wise it's a functional demo - the only thing I might change personally is that the lead guitar had a bit too much bite on my speakers. But it's probably still within the realm of the subjective.
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    • #3
      I think this is a highly creative and enjoyable song. I may have commented on MUSE but if not...



      What I like most about it is how the lyrics draw you into the story without it being head on. That whole asking questions thing "
      <div class="signaturecontainer"><i>&quot;Now and then... occasionally... it seems to have.... too many notes&quot;</i><br></div>

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      • #4
        Yeah, I agree with Ricki. I love the asking questions style of this song...I also find that the title line "He's not that kind of man" really fits well in the song and ties everything together (even if it wasn't the title).
        All things must pass...

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        • #5
          I've struggled with this subject matter myself, and the only thought I can pass along is that it is very easy to slip entirely to one side on the narrative and land too hard on the judgmental while missing the opportunity for empathetic insight.



          The daughter sees something in him - what do you think that is?
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          Before you leave the house, look in the mirror and take one thing off.

          -Coco Chanel

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          • #6
            I can't listen right now but I absolutely love the lyric. I'd offer only one change. From "He
            Thomas Jefferson said... "The day will come when the mystical generation of Jesus, by the Supreme Being as His father, in the womb of a virgin will be classed with the fable of the generation of Minerva in the brain of Jupiter." hmmm...

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            • #7






              Quote Originally Posted by Lee Knight
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              I'd offer only one change. From "He
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              • #8
                I don't know about the above suggestion to change the end line to another question. To me, it's a nice contrast to have all those questions asked and then BAM! An actual statement comes in and finalises things. I liked that, and if it IS what you want to convey in the song - that somehow you KNOW he's not that kind of man and you're only asking those questions of your daughter because you want HER to answer them herself and come to the same conclusion, then that's fine.



                However, if the meaning you're more interested in getting across is actually that you DON'T know if he's that kind of man but you just FEAR he's not good enough (as pretty much every father does about their daughters), then changing that line to a question is good and you have my approval. LOL
                All things must pass...

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                • #9
                  I'd keep it as it is, with "He
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                  • #10
                    -Hey there Shadowsbird......and Aloha!!!! Do you know any of the Ibanez (there are variences in the spelling) family?

                    Anyways..thanks for listening and commenting....and Aww is wonderful! Thanks. The lyric was written on the bedside of my tearing little ficticious girl ;-)

                    And the guitar is something I absolutely love.....but I do receive many doubts on the volume and tone....I'm not sure, yet, as to how to handle it. Thanks....... -Tom

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                    • #11
                      I think it's great.



                      The only thing I'd consider changing is 'princess,' probably my own personal hangup.
                      ...

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                      • #12
                        -Hey there Rickidoo....I am really pleased you like the lyric....thanks for listening and commenting!!

                        -Tom



                        -And thank you, as well, Leo, for the encourgement!!

                        -Tom

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                        • #13






                          Quote Originally Posted by grace_slick
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                          I don't know about the above suggestion to change the end line to another question. To me, it's a nice contrast to have all those questions asked and then BAM! An actual statement comes in and finalises things. I liked that, and if it IS what you want to convey in the song - that somehow you KNOW he's not that kind of man and you're only asking those questions of your daughter because you want HER to answer them herself and come to the same conclusion, then that's fine.



                          However, if the meaning you're more interested in getting across is actually that you DON'T know if he's that kind of man but you just FEAR he's not good enough (as pretty much every father does about their daughters), then changing that line to a question is good and you have my approval. LOL




                          Hi Grace...first off, I'd like to thank you for the Kudo's (they can be really under rated) ;-)



                          And although Lee's prospective is a fresh one, and note worthy.....I am happy with the story's layout and punch lines....thanks for commenting Grace!! -Tom

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                          • #14
                            Hi Lee....thanks sooo much for commenting!! It is really appreciated. That's a good idea you have from a diffrent prospective...interesting....but, I am partial to the layout of the story as I have it. I'm coming from the angle that I know this dude, and don't like him.......but, for my daughter's sake, I must be respectful and gentle.

                            Thanks again........-Tom

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                            • #15
                              Hey there Rick....so nice to hear from you!! And thanks for the listen and comment!

                              And I think we should return our politicians to China for a full refund...(or maybe for full credit)



                              Thanks again!! -Tom

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