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This Might Not Last Forever


Lee Knight

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I've gotten into journaling. The Morning Pages. Just write a bunch of {censored}. Don't edit it. Don't think about it. But most important, don't NOT do it. So I do it. And sometimes stuff comes out and I think, "How do I make a song of that? I like that. How do I... or do I?" From this morning's Morning Pages. Not a song, not a poem. Just one dude "journalling!"

 

Anything here to take further and refine into a song? And BTW? "no" is a perfectly acceptable answer. :)

 

Note: The original down below.

 

*Updating here as I go...

 

This Might Not Last Forever

 

V1

I found a bone while digging in the garden today

The previous owner's dog maybe?

The past is present, like dirt in my hands

And one day that bone will be me

 

A reminder of what is to come

That what walks the earth tonight

Will sleep with the worms tomorrow

We are here to enjoy this life

 

Pre1

Why cry, why complain?

Why choose the dark when light pours through your windowpane?

With some things we don't have a choice, so...

 

C1

Choose to laugh

Choose to smile

Choose to hug

And choose pain every once in a while

Choose to run

But never away

And if you fall

Stand up again

Choose to surrender

Because this might not last forever

 

V2

Not sad, not afraid that one day we'll die

But we have this time right now, right now

A moment that lasts a lifetime

And might carry on somehow

 

We don't bury our dead in our yards

But in modern Rome, when they build a museum or store

Workers unearth layers of bodies

The past and present shaking hands through iron ore

 

Pre2

Why cry, why complain?

Why choose the dark when light pours through your windowpane?

With some things we don't have a choice, so...

 

C2

Choose to laugh

Choose to smile

Choose to hug

And choose pain every once in a while

Choose to run

But never away

And if you fall

Stand up again

Choose to surrender

Because this might not last forever

 

 

Original journal entry: 

This Might Not Last Forever

 

I found a bone in the garden today

Some sort of animal, or person maybe?

The past is present like dirt in my hands

And that bone is my destiny

 

A reminder of what is to come

That what walks the earth today

Will sleep with the worms tomorrow

And we are here to laugh and enjoy life

Not sad, not afraid that one day we'll die

But we have this time right now

Right now.

A moment that lasts forever

And surely will not last

 

That garden bone couldn't have been a person could it?

We don't bury our dead in our yards

I heard that in modern Rome, when they build

They unearth layers of bodies

The past and present shaking hands in the now

Why choose to cry?

Why choose to complain?

Why choose the dark?

Why choose to be insane?

Some things we don't have a choice in, so...

 

Choose to laugh

Choose to smile

Choose to hug

And yes, choose pain every once in a while

Choose to run

But never away

And if you fall, stand again

Choose to surrender

Because this might not last forever

 

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It only took me one line to say a resounding "yes!".  That is a fantastic open and makes me invest immediately.  About the only part I don't think fits the mood is the ponderings of whether it is a person or not.  You can offer that idea, "life building on life", without bringing that morbidity to it.

This is your hook, FWIW.

Choose to surrender

Because this might not last forever

 

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Oswlek wrote:

 

 

It only took me one line to say a resounding "yes!".  That is a fantastic open and makes me invest immediately.  About the only part I don't think fits the mood is the ponderings of whether it is a person or not.  You can offer that idea, "life building on life", without bringing that morbidity to it.

 

This is your hook, FWIW.

Choose to surrender

Because this might not last forever

 


 

 

Thanks, O. That helps a lot. I agree that could be a refrain at the end of each verse. Stuff to think about... cool.

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