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  • This Might Not Last Forever

    I've gotten into journaling. The Morning Pages. Just write a bunch of ****************. Don't edit it. Don't think about it. But most important, don't NOT do it. So I do it. And sometimes stuff comes out and I think, "How do I make a song of that? I like that. How do I... or do I?" From this morning's Morning Pages. Not a song, not a poem. Just one dude "journalling!"

     

    Anything here to take further and refine into a song? And BTW? "no" is a perfectly acceptable answer.

     

    Note: The original down below.

     

    *Updating here as I go...

     

    This Might Not Last Forever

     

    V1

    I found a bone while digging in the garden today

    The previous owner's dog maybe?

    The past is present, like dirt in my hands

    And one day that bone will be me

     

    A reminder of what is to come

    That what walks the earth tonight

    Will sleep with the worms tomorrow

    We are here to enjoy this life

     

    Pre1

    Why cry, why complain?

    Why choose the dark when light pours through your windowpane?

    With some things we don't have a choice, so...

     

    C1

    Choose to laugh

    Choose to smile

    Choose to hug

    And choose pain every once in a while

    Choose to run

    But never away

    And if you fall

    Stand up again

    Choose to surrender

    Because this might not last forever

     

    V2

    Not sad, not afraid that one day we'll die

    But we have this time right now, right now

    A moment that lasts a lifetime

    And might carry on somehow

     

    We don't bury our dead in our yards

    But in modern Rome, when they build a museum or store

    Workers unearth layers of bodies

    The past and present shaking hands through iron ore

     

    Pre2

    Why cry, why complain?

    Why choose the dark when light pours through your windowpane?

    With some things we don't have a choice, so...

     

    C2

    Choose to laugh

    Choose to smile

    Choose to hug

    And choose pain every once in a while

    Choose to run

    But never away

    And if you fall

    Stand up again

    Choose to surrender

    Because this might not last forever

     

     

    Original journal entry: 

    This Might Not Last Forever

     

    I found a bone in the garden today

    Some sort of animal, or person maybe?

    The past is present like dirt in my hands

    And that bone is my destiny

     

    A reminder of what is to come

    That what walks the earth today

    Will sleep with the worms tomorrow

    And we are here to laugh and enjoy life

    Not sad, not afraid that one day we'll die

    But we have this time right now

    Right now.

    A moment that lasts forever

    And surely will not last

     

    That garden bone couldn't have been a person could it?

    We don't bury our dead in our yards

    I heard that in modern Rome, when they build

    They unearth layers of bodies

    The past and present shaking hands in the now

    Why choose to cry?

    Why choose to complain?

    Why choose the dark?

    Why choose to be insane?

    Some things we don't have a choice in, so...

     

    Choose to laugh

    Choose to smile

    Choose to hug

    And yes, choose pain every once in a while

    Choose to run

    But never away

    And if you fall, stand again

    Choose to surrender

    Because this might not last forever

     

    __________
    Your god doesn't exist but my god does and he is all loving. If you disagree with me I'll kill you. - Prince Ea

  • #2

    It only took me one line to say a resounding "yes!".  That is a fantastic open and makes me invest immediately.  About the only part I don't think fits the mood is the ponderings of whether it is a person or not.  You can offer that idea, "life building on life", without bringing that morbidity to it.

    This is your hook, FWIW.

    Choose to surrender

    Because this might not last forever


    Don't listen to Justin.
    LCK - 2/21/2012

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    • Lee Knight
      Lee Knight commented
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      Oswlek wrote:

      It only took me one line to say a resounding "yes!".  That is a fantastic open and makes me invest immediately.  About the only part I don't think fits the mood is the ponderings of whether it is a person or not.  You can offer that idea, "life building on life", without bringing that morbidity to it.

      This is your hook, FWIW.

      Choose to surrender

      Because this might not last forever

       


       

      Thanks, O. That helps a lot. I agree that could be a refrain at the end of each verse. Stuff to think about... cool.


  • #3
    That is an interesting idea Ryan, but I'm leaning toward not using that Rome idea at all. I think looking at that second half of verse two as almost a bridge, with that sort of outlook lyrically might be interesting.
    __________
    Your god doesn't exist but my god does and he is all loving. If you disagree with me I'll kill you. - Prince Ea

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    • #4
      In other words, I'm not sure an Italian motif is really fitting here.
      __________
      Your god doesn't exist but my god does and he is all loving. If you disagree with me I'll kill you. - Prince Ea

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      • Monkey Uncle
        Monkey Uncle commented
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        Late to the party...

        It sounds like you've already deep-sixed the Rome part.  But FWIW, my issue with that part isn't so much the subject matter, it's the fact that it reads more like prose than verse.

        Otherwise, I think this lyric is fantastic.



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