Members grace_slick Posted April 12, 2013 Members Share Posted April 12, 2013 I feel guilty for posting a new song (although it's been a while) when I haven't had the time to listen to anyone else's songs for so long! I'm sorry, lovely people. Here it is, anyway...the vocals are a bit strained as my voice is not being too cooperative today. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12268015 Heart Shaped Door I hear you knocking at me I hear you knocking at my door I hear you calling for me You came a Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted April 12, 2013 Members Share Posted April 12, 2013 Another great song right here. Personally i'd probably say: I hear you knocking at MYI hear you knocking at my doorI hear you calling for meYou came a Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members grace_slick Posted April 12, 2013 Author Members Share Posted April 12, 2013 Thanks Sticky! Yes, I agree with your suggestions...all of them. I actually did try to do a chorus where you'd put it, but I just could NOT find a chord progression or rhythm I liked! I tried 2 separate ones and both SUCKED! So I just didn't do one at all. I preferred to have the song as is, with NO chorus, as opposed to screwing it up with a craptastic chorus, you know? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Monkey Uncle Posted April 13, 2013 Members Share Posted April 13, 2013 Hi Grace,I'm in basic agreement with everyone else: what you have is a very good start, but it needs a chorus. What you have here feels like it should be a pre-chorus:And I know it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted April 14, 2013 Members Share Posted April 14, 2013 Hey Grace! You sound lovely as usual. Song is good, piano is good. Let the bass walk a little - the groove is ok but there's more to bass than just bomping out the root of the chord. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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