Heart Shaped Door

[grace_slick]

I feel guilty for posting a new song (although it's been a while) when I haven't had the time to listen to anyone else's songs for so long! I'm sorry, lovely people.

Here it is, anyway...the vocals are a bit strained as my voice is not being too cooperative today.

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12268015

 

Heart Shaped Door

I hear you knocking at me

I hear you knocking at my door

I hear you calling for me

You came a

[stickboymusic]

Another great song right here.

 

Personally i'd probably say:

 

I hear you knocking at MY

I hear you knocking at my door

I hear you calling for me

You came a

[grace_slick]

Thanks Sticky!

Yes, I agree with your suggestions...all of them. I actually did try to do a chorus where you'd put it, but I just could NOT find a chord progression or rhythm I liked! I tried 2 separate ones and both SUCKED! So I just didn't do one at all. I preferred to have the song as is, with NO chorus, as opposed to screwing it up with a craptastic chorus, you know?

[Monkey Uncle]

Hi Grace,

I'm in basic agreement with everyone else: what you have is a very good start, but it needs a chorus.  What you have here feels like it should be a pre-chorus:

And I know it

[rsadasiv]

Hey Grace!

 

You sound lovely as usual. Song is good, piano is good. Let the bass walk a little - the groove is ok but there's more to bass than just bomping out the root of the chord.